Pre-TOEFL writing, What are some of the qualities of a good parent? - rewrite -

Lesson 12  Writing Topic

What are some of the qualities of a good parent? Use specific details and examples to explain your answer.

☆Hints for Points

A good parent …

1.     does not neglect his or her children, and provides necessary care and protection for them.

Many children suffer or die because of neglect.  きちんと世話をする   怠慢により苦しむ子供が沢山いる

2.     guide the child to be independent and help it (to) join in the society when it is appropriate.

Weaning oneself from one’s child at the right time is important. 自立を促す    子離れする

3.     considers his or her children as other individuals not his or her belongings. 個人として認める

Forcing children to do what they want them to do is harmful.  押しつけはしない

4.     can share thoughts and feelings with the child.  考えや気持ちを共有する

Sharing information helps the child stay away from problems. 情報共有により子供は問題を避けられる

5.     controls his or her emotions so that the child will not get confused and he or she can feel secure.

Mothers of good students are relaxed and never fail to keep smiling every day.

混乱せず安心できるように感情を制御する      いつもくつろいでいて微笑みを絶やさない

6.     shows good examples for the child to follow. 良いお手本を示す

Imitating is learning. 真似ることは習う事

☆Sample Essay Structure

【Introduction = Outline】A good parent is a good human being. 良い人が良い親

【Point 1】A good parent should have few problems. 問題をほとんど抱えていない

【Point 2】A good parent loves the child in simple ways. 素朴に子供を愛する

【Point 3 / Follow-up】Helping the child (to) have a good future is the goal. 良い将来を得る手助けをする

【Conclusion = Wrap-up】 A good parent plays a role of a good mentor for the child. 良いお手本になる

Your Sample Essay Structure

【Introduction = Outline】

【Point 1】

【Point 2】

【Point 3 / Follow-up】

【Conclusion = Wrap-up】

☆Sample Paragraph Development of Point 1 in Sample Essay Structure

【Main Idea】A good parent should have few problems. 問題をほとんど抱えていない

【Explanation】If a parent has a problem, the child will suffer.  親に問題があると子供が苦しむ

【Example】Children of smokers will start smoking at an early age. Abused children will suffer from the trauma and often become abusive to others.  喫煙や虐待は子供を苦しめたり受け継がれたりする

【Follow up】No one is perfect, but anyone can try to be perfect. They can try to follow the basic rules in society, give up bad habits, and fight down the impulse. 完全な人はいないが努力はできる

【Conclusion】A good parent transforms himself or herself for the sake of the child. 子供の為に変われる親が良い親