2023年8月26日土曜日

TOEFL iBT Academic Discussion and Writing Do automobliles have produced greater benefits or greater problems?

Question

Based on the societal implications, do you believe automobiles have produced greater benefits or greater problems?

 

 

Let’s Think

1.        Give other examples of Isabelle’s point, “the unparalleled convenience offered by automobiles”.

2.        Give other examples of Oscar’s point, “monumental environmental cost”.

3.        What other advantages and disadvantages do cars have?

4.        What is your answer to Professor Clarke’s question? Why?

 

 

Hints for Points

1.        Cars offered more choices of relationships, such as individuals living out of your town.

2.        Automobiles accelerated geographic mobility. Living far from the work place is possible.

3.        Automobiles have replaced animals for work. They can carry more things faster than animals.

4.        Cars have activated economic activities.

5.        Noise pollution is another drawback of cars.

6.        Life of drivers is more sedentary and so less healthy than that of non-drivers.

7.        Car accidents has raised death rates.

8.        Dependence on oil distorted the politics since

 

 

Response for Ideas and Expression

I think benefits of automobiles are greater than their problems. Although the negative by-products of cars such as toxic gas emissions and noise pollutions pose threat to our lives, too many breakthroughs that made modern life possible are attributed to them. The advent of automobile evolved traveling, allowing us to reach the destination faster, more easily, and with less cost. This brought about the modern economy, where products and population are moved faster in large amounts. Then helped by the mass production of cars, the speed of development was accelerated, which lead to the expansion of our civilization and development of our culture, enriching our lives. Highways are built and new activities are born. Even new kinds of entertainment like driving and car racing occurred. Indeed, today’s world is not possible without cars. Therefore, automobiles have benefitted us more than they harmed us. (143 words)

 

Admitting that the contribution of automobile to society is huge, I insist that the problems of cars are unignorable. The biggest costs of cars are air and water pollution and global warming, whose progress is due largely to the exhaust gas emissions from cars. Global warming has caused climate change, which is the cause of large numbers of death and threat to our own species as well as other species. Automobiles also have made humans arrogant. Freedom acquired at the wheel in a vehicle that allows you to travel faster than any animal with potentially dangerous power often metamorphoses a humble traveler to a macromania, who has illegitimate sense of power above pedestrians and other drivers. This mentality often stays with the driver even when he is not driving and it now makes the norm of our society, which is characterized by high velocities with violent moves that leaves no space for sensitivity, courteousness, or kindness and make them no more than naivete and weakness to take advantage of. A neurotic comparison of drivers and non-drivers would reveal the difference of brain wiring between these two tribes. The degrading of humanity is an incomparable cost. (195 words)

 

 

Response plan

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TOEFL iBT Academic Discussion and Writing 9-2 Is it more beneficial for schools to have strict rules, or should a more relaxed approach be taken? - revised -

 

Question

In your opinion, is it more beneficial for schools to have strict rules, or should a more relaxed approach be taken?

 

 

Let’s Think

Do research on the following questions and discuss them with others.

1.        What is Amanda’s point? Provide a case in point.

2.        What is Pete’s point? Provide a case in point.

3.        What is your answer to this question? Share your opinion.

 

 

Hints for Points

1.        Rules protect children from troubles.

2.        Children must learn to follow rules to be a law-abiding citizen.

3.        Lack of discipline will make individuals dull like today’s rich retarded politicians who are destroying our country.

4.        It is wrong not to allow autonomy above certain level in anything.

5.        Creativity will be lost because children are not allowed free-thinking. Probably, the large number of strict rules at Japanese schools is related to the small number of protests and that protesters are regarded as if they were terrorists.

6.        Children cannot become independent because they do not learn to think by themselves.

 

 

Responses for Ideas and Expressions

It is violation of human rights when children are deprived of freedom above certain level. Of course, some rules are necessary for the good of the individual or society. For example, smoking is prohibited in hospitals to protect patients. Wearing seatbelt is mandatory to protect life. However, rules of underwear colors or the number of times a student can use a bathroom are useless, if not harmful. Forcing students with wavy hair or brown hair by birth to change their hair into dark straight hair is abusive. Prohibiting students from wearing a heavy coat during winter or drinking water in the classroom is life-threatening. These rules all violate students’ right to pursue a healthy and cultural life and happiness. Therefore, school rules should not be strict. (126 words)

 

Although some rules are vital for order and safety, I believe a more relaxed approach to school rules should be taken. School in itself is a device to restrict children’s freedom. It forces children to attend 5 to 6 days a week for 4 to 6 hours a day during fixed hours. Some subjects are required subjects. This is already stressful to children even if these rules are intended to help them. Moreover, some schools have uniforms or strict dress codes. Many schools have many more meaningless rules that restrict students’ life to the last detail. The purpose of these rules is to control. By exacting obedience, school successfully makes children braindead. It is for this reason that any fascist entity has countless numbers of rules. Therefore, for healthy environment for education to raise freer, creative minds, school must have as few rules as possible.

(145 words)

 

 

 

Response plan

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Supporting Details:

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2023年8月21日月曜日

TOEFL iBT Academic Discussion and Writing 9-1 A job that won't be replaced by robots in the future - revised -

Question

What is one job that you think won’t be replaced by robots in the future and why?

 

 

Let’s Think

Do research on the following questions and discuss them with others.

1.        What is Janet’s point? Provide a case in point.

2.        What is Thomas’s point? Provide a case in point.

3.        What is your answer to this question? Share your opinion.

 

 

Hints for Points

1.        Social worker

2.        Medical personnel

3.        Zoo attendant

4.        Musician, dancer, and artist

5.        Athlete

6.        Writer and movie director

7.        Manager and CEO

8.        Detective

9.        Researcher

 

 

Response for Ideas and Expressions

I believe the job of artists won’t be replaced by AI. Fine art that AI produces, for instance, are just a combination of existing information of works related to the given theme. For example, AI would be able to copy works of Vincent van Gogh or produce works that look like a van Gogh. However, they won’t be able to reproduce his anxiety or longing in a new piece because an AI doesn’t have a suffering spirit that van Gogh had. It has no spirit at all. Neither does it have a hand or eyes wired to the brain where the suffering and joy of life occurs. For the same reason, it won’t be able to make humans laugh with humor except for unintended ones. It cannot have empathy or mercy, nor can it have dream or vision. It has no concern, insight, or inspiration, either. It has no passion. It cannot love even a puppy. Not a bit of mind shared by life exist in it. Thus, it cannot make a masterpiece that truly impress us. Unless humans lose spirit, heart, or mind, AI artists won’t be able to fool us. At best, it would be a tool for inspiration whose random results we may find interest in. (209 words)

 

 

Response plan

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2023年8月18日金曜日

早稲田国際教養学部AO入試 CApitalism and its Critics: A Modern Marx - rewrite -

 

今回は、資本主義と格差の問題です。SILSでは、今回のThomas PikettyJeffrey D. Sachs(添付したExtra MaterialReferenceの引用文の筆者)のような、新しい経済・社会体制構築のための提案をする学者の文章を使った問題が出題されています。これは、現在、資本主義という経済体制の問題点が様々な形で噴出してきており(例: 大国の資源独占と暴力に対抗する海賊・テロや、温暖化、環境破壊によるパンデミック等)極端な格差が倫理的に問題であるだけでなく、温暖化による気候変動を乗り切るために避けて通れない課題になっていることと関係があると思われます。マイケル・ムーア監督が教皇フランシスコに会った際、”Is capitalism a sin?”と尋ねると教皇は “Si.”「はい。」と即答したという逸話があります。ヨーロッパでは病院や大学が無料の国が多数あります。アメリカのような、国民の大多数が貯金もなくその日暮らしである一方で、働かなくても豪奢な生活をしている1%の超富裕層が政治・経済を支配している社会から、全ての人にやさしい経済・社会への移行が始まっているのです。アメリカでも、バイデン大統領になってから、最低賃金15ドルや学生ローンの帳消しといった格差是正政策が実施されています。これらの点を確認したのち、解き直してみて下さい。

 

解答のポイント

主題:トマ・ピケティの「21世紀の資本論」は、資本収益率(資本収入÷元の資本)は経済成長率(経済成長による収入増)より多いので、戦争や不景気のような例外を除けば、富が集中する傾向にあることを示し、将来は富の蓄積が進むと予測し、富の再分配のために累進課税を提案している。しかし予測は理論ではなく過去のデータに基づく仮説にすぎず、提案は体制の反発や他の方法を考慮せずに富裕層課税に注目しているのでイデオロギー的で非実際的だ。

本文該当箇所 タイトル「21世紀の資本論とその批判: 現代のマルクス」3段落 as a guide to action, is deeply flawed.” 行動指針としては大きな欠陥がある。 4段落 the period from about 1914 to the 1970s was historically unusual, in that both income gap and accumulated wealth (relative to annual national income) fell dramatically. Since the 1970s, both wealth and income gaps have been rising back towards their pre-20th-century norms. 19141970年代は収入格差と蓄積された富の両方が歳入に対し劇的に下がったという点で歴史的に例外だった。1970年代以降、富と収入格差の両方が20世紀以前の標準に上がってきている。5段落 free-market system has a natural tendency towards increasing the concentration of wealth, because the rate of return on property and investments has consistently been higher than the rate of economic growth. 資産と投資による収益率は経済成長率より常に高いので、自由市場制は富の集中が自ずから増加する傾向がある。higher returns on capital will concentrate wealth―especially when, as now, an aging population means that growth should slow. 高い資本収益は富を集中させる、特に現在のように高齢化により経済成長率が下がる時は。6段落 it is a prediction based on what has happened in the past, not an inherent model of capitalism. 資本主義の本質的なモデルではなく過去に起こったことに基づいた予測である。7段落 He proposes a gradually rising global tax on capital 彼は累進性のる世界的な資産課税(グローバル資産課税)を提案している。8段落 Most economists, common sense, and a lot of French business people would disagree. They would argue that higher taxes on income and wealth put off entrepreneurs and risk taking. 大半の経済学者と常識そして多くのフランス企業家は反対するだろう。高い所得税と資産税は起業家や冒険の意欲を失わせると主張するだろう。He ignores other ways to broaden the ownership of capital. 彼は資産所有のすそ野を広げる他の方法を無視している9段落Picketty’s focus on punishing the rich sounds like socialist ideology, not scholarship. That may explain why Capital is a bestseller. But it is a poor guide for action. 富裕層を罰することへのピケティの注目は学問ではなく社会主義イデオロギーのようだ。だからこそ「資本論」はベストセラーなのだろうが、行動指針としてはお粗末である。

 

各段落の要旨

第1段落 マルクスの「資本論」と違いピケティの「21世紀の資本論」は 短期間でベストセラーになった。

2段落 タイミングが良かったのでこの本は売れた。アメリカでは近年格差拡大が注目されているのでこの本の主張(資本主義は富の蓄積を招くので世界的に富に課税すべき)が左翼に注目された。 

3段落 しかし現実的ではない。

4段落 この本の3つの大きな貢献のひとつめは、1914年から1970年代は格差が狭まった例外的な期間であり、70年代以降は19世紀レベルまで格差が拡大していることを、税統計により示したことである。 

5段落 二つ目の貢献は、資本論により格差拡大傾向を説明し、将来を予測した点だ。ピケティによれば、経済成長率よりも資産を元手に投資した時の利益の方が常に大きいので、自由市場は富の蓄積を増大させる。二つの大戦や恐慌は資産投資の利益を減少させたが、そのような例外的要因がなければ、そして特に成長率の低い高齢化社会では資産による大きな利益は富の蓄積を招く。しかしこの予測は問題だ。 

6段落 ピケティの予測は本質的な資本理論ではなく過去のデータに基づいた仮説に過ぎない。富が蓄積されても資産による利益は下がらないと想定している。

7段落 3つめの貢献は、富の集中は避けられないだけでなく最大の問題だとし、資本への累進課税と50万ドル以上の年収には80%の税率を提案したことだがこれは問題だ。

8段落 この提案(世界的な自由経済で蓄積する富への大きな課税による富の再分配)は左翼寄りで信頼性を失わせる。富の集中が問題であるということを説明するというよりも主張しているのであり、富の再分配の他の方法もほぼ無視している。収入と資産への高い税率は起業家や冒険の意欲を無くさせるし、相続税など他の再分配の方法もある。

9段落 ピケティが富裕層を罰することに集中しているのは社会主義のイデオロギーのように聞こえ、従ってベストセラーにはなるが、行動指針としてはお粗末である。

 

問1 別紙参照。

 

問2 ピケティの本の3つの貢献のひとつを選び、自分の言葉を使い英語で要約し、エコノミスト紙はその貢献を支持していると思うかどうかを説明してください。解答欄の所定箇所を使ってください。

考え方 問後半「エコノミスト紙はその貢献を支持していると思うかどうか」の判断は本文の表現を根拠にする

本文該当箇所 主題本文該当箇所と第4段落以降の要旨および別紙参照

 

問3 資本主義社会における富の集中は重大問題だと考えますか?必ず少なくとも2点の主張を自分自身の言葉でするようにしてください。解答欄の所定箇所に英語で書いてください。

考え方 Yesの場合 テキストの内容を基に解答することもできるし、自分の知識を基に応えることもできる。

1)【テキストの内容を基に解答する場合の例】 筆者はピケティの格差拡大が大問題であるという前提に説明がないことは問題だとしている(第8段落始め)が、格差拡大の問題性自体については明確に否定してはいない。 21世紀の資本論」にある、そして筆者が取り上げている「現在格差が20世紀以前の状態(レ・ミゼラブルやクリスマス・キャロルの時代背景に近い)になりつつある」という事実から極端な格差社会の再来(王侯貴族対農奴の格差社会の現代版)につながる可能性が推測できるので重大だと考えられる。(格差拡大が進むかどうかについて、筆者はこの予測が過去のデータに基づいたものに過ぎないとしており、この点についてはピケティ自身も資本論の冒頭で将来予測不可能な要因(技術革新など)により彼の予測が外れる可能性は指摘している。しかし過去の予測に基づいた将来の予測は一般的な科学的推論であり、地球温暖化も少子高齢化も過去のデータに基づいた将来の予測で今のところ予測通りの結果が出ているし経済動向予測は通常過去のデータに基づいている。例えばブルームバーグや帝国データバンクはそのためのサービス(企業株価動向分析ソフト・経済情報提供サービス)を提供している。さらに富の蓄積は人口増加が減速し(更に高齢化が進み)生産性が上がらない時に進むと考えられる(5段落最後)が、これらすべては今の傾向で今後も続くことが予測されている。)筆者の言う累進課税以外の富の再分配手段については様々な法の抜け穴による税逃れがあるためこれまで有効ではなかった。

2)【自分の知識を基に解答する場合の例】●極端な富の蓄積は社会に悪い影響を与える。尊厳ある生活ができない人が多くなる。金融恐慌・環境破壊・弱者の犠牲などの結果を生む 富の蓄積は金権政治に繋がり、民衆の福利を犠牲にして拡大し、民主主義を無効にする 中流すなわち大半の労働力を破壊して消費意欲を減少させ病気や犯罪等の社会問題を増加させるので社会全体が不健全になる。

Noの場合 1)  【本文を基に解答する場合】 経済成長により景気が良くなれば問題ない。富の蓄積より経済成長率が高ければ人々の暮らし向きは良くなるので富の蓄積は問題にならない。技術革新と法整備が徐々に格差を解消する。筆者はピケティの予測が外れる可能性があるとしているし、グローバル資産課税以外の富の再分配方法があると言っている。今まで大発明・発見により皆の暮らし向きは良くなってきたし、現在では社会保障制度や選挙権もある。最低賃金引き上げが行われたり、米証券取引所が最高経営責任者と社員(メディアン)の賃金格差の公開を大手企業に求めたりと徐々に格差是正は進んでいる。【自分の知識を基に解答する場合】 富裕層がしっかりしていれば共産主義(政府が経済の大半を管理し、自由を制限する)よりましだ。《反論下記参照》

Yes, the concentration of wealth in capitalist societies is a significant problem.                                                                                                                                          

1)     The writer, even though he criticizes that Piketty does not explain why the concentration of wealth is problematic, does not clearly deny the significance of wealth concentration itself. Thus, it could be inferred that it is a significant problem. As Capitalism of the 21st Century says and this article repeats it, the rich has amassed most of the resources except for during wars and Depression and that the level of the inequality is going back to that of the 19th century, which is close to the times of Les Misérables in France and A Christmas Carol in England. This trend may lead to the modern version of the feudalistic society, where income slaves, most of us, are exploited by the super-rich, multibillionaires. (The writer discredits Piketty’s prediction, pointing out that it is only based on the past data, not a theory, and Piketty himself points out at the beginning of Capitalism of the 21st Century the possibility that some unpredictable factors like war or technological breakthrough will change the trend. However, predicting the future based on past data is a common scientific practice of reasoning. Global warming and aging society with lower birth rates have been induced from the past data and proved right. Also, economic forecasting is usually done using past data. Companies like Bloomberg and Teikoku Databank provide services for it. In addition, wealth gap widens when economic growth slows down due to low population growth, combined with aging, and low productivity. All of them have been going on and are expected to go on.) The means of redistribution other than progressive tax the writer mentions have loopholes and have not worked well.

2)     The concentration of resources in capitalist society negatively influence society. It produces people who cannot live in dignity. It causes devastating financial meltdowns, harms the environment, and victimizes the weak.  Accumulation of wealth leads to plutocracy, which will destroy democracy at the expense of the well-being of the public.  Huge income gap will lower the overall well-being of the society because it destroys the middleclass, and this lowers consumer confidence and increases social problems such as higher rates of diseases and crimes.

No, the concentration of wealth in capitalist societies is not a significant problem.

1)     Economic growth will improve the economic climate. As long as the economic growth rate surpasses the rate of the return of capital, people are well-off, and the concentration of wealth is not a big issue. Development of technology and that of legal systems will gradually eliminate inequality. Technological breakthroughs have helped make everyone better-off and we have social security laws now.

2)     Efforts are being made to raise minimum wages. The Securities and Exchange Commission in the US decided to require companies to make CEO-worker pay gap open. Even though this happened after world-wide protests against wealth concentration and applies to only large companies, and thus they could be only an action to pacify the public anger, the changes are happening step by step. If the owners of the concentrated wealth are fair, wise, and benevolent and use the extra money for causes good for humanity, concentration of wealth is not a significant problem. It is better than communism, whose government controls much of its economic activities and allows little freedom.

Counterarguments: 1) Developed countries cannot have more growth, and the growth of developing countries are hampered by unfair trade agreements. A sustainable energy source that can truly replace oil seems too difficult to invent.  2) Lip-service has been made, and wealth gap has increased over the past 30 years. Authoritarianism is on the rise. Human nature is not so good as to have a good king. See Jeff Bezos, who has slave-driven his workers to build his wealth, paid a fortune to crush union-organizing, and had a space trip “’cause you guys paid for all this.”

 

早稲田国際教養AO Extra Material  Causes of Poverty

 

This map is taken from a website entitled World Map of Railways. Take a look at it and answer the following questions.

 

World Map of Railways

(http://theintrepid.blogspot.com/2009/10/world-map-of-railways.html)

 

 

1.    Focusing on Africa and India, write a paragraph explaining what you can learn from this map concerning the relationship between the development of train networks and poverty.

                                                            

                                                               

                                                            

                                                            

                                                            

                                                            

                                                              

2.    Discuss what aspects other than infrastructure are necessary to fight poverty.

                                                            

                                                               

                                                            

                                                            

                                                            

                                                            

                                                               

                                                            

Answer Keys

1.    Focusing on Africa and India, write a paragraph explaining what you can learn from this map concerning the relationship between infrastructure and poverty.

 

I can learn from this map that whether a country has its infrastructure in place or not is related to its poverty. Africa, the worlds poorest continent, has few railway networks except in South Africa and countries up in the north, while India, which is now regarded as an emerging economy, has railways which are as closely woven as those in many developed nations such as England and Japan. This contrast between these two countries, which share the history of colonization, independence after WWII, and epidemic-like poverty which followed after the independence, tells that the existence of railways can be one of the factors that have decided their destinies. During the Green Revolution in the 1960s and the IT revolution in the 2010, India had a transportation system that the British had built during the colonial period. It was ready to accommodate the needs to move materials and people quickly and in large amounts. Africa, on the other hand, has few railways to provide necessities such as food, medicine, and materials, and this hampers the efforts for development.

 

2.    Discuss what aspects other than infrastructure are necessary to fight poverty.

 

The key to successful fight against poverty is to assist the poor out of the vicious cycle of subsistence by making them able to support themselves and develop their community by themselves. To help start their self-sustaining growth, developed countries can assist them in four areas other than helping build their infrastructure.

1) assistance in agriculture: We must help them out of food shortage through provision of materials, technology, and skills.

2) assistance in health care: We must help them eliminate preventable deaths from bad healthcare conditions, providing basic healthcare, and fight against epidemic and endemic diseases.

3) assistance in education: We must help their children receive proper education so that they can contribute to the community.

4) assistance in reducing violence: We must support the people to escape from violence by men, the powerful, and the police.

5) eliminate discrimination: We must get rid of discrimination based on race, religion, or sex, which prevent people from functioning normally or getting appropriate results for their efforts and ability.

 

 

 

Reference

Excerpts from Common Wealth Economics for a Crowded Planet, Jeffrey D. Sachs (Underlined by Sasaki)

pp.227-228: Unlike the Eurasian landmass, sub-Saharan Africa is inherently isolated by the Sahara and by the lack of rivers navigable from the ocean to the interior. Moreover, the colonial powers did not build much infrastructure in the interior of Africa. In India, the British raj constructed a thorough rail network often connected to rural roads, in part to bring Indias rural cotton production to British factories. In Africa, by contrast, rails were not built to reach villages but rather a few diamond and gold mines. The result was not a rail network but some disconnected rail capillaries that reached only a tiny proportion of Africas rural population.

 

pp. 229-231: The poor know what to do but are too poor to do it. Since they cant meet their immediate needs (food, safe water, health care) they also cant afford to save and invest for the future. That is where foreign assistance comes in. A temporary boost of aid over the course of several years, if properly invested, can lead to a permanent rise in productivity. That boost, in turn, leads to self-sustaining growth. The logical chain is the following:

 

Temporary aidBoost of productivityRise of saving and investmentSustained growth

 

The escape from extreme poverty requires four basic types of investment. The first is a boost to productivity of the core livelihood, agriculture. This is the hallowed Green Revolution that initially lifts smallholder farmers out of subsistence. The second is health, including control of the main killersinfection, nutritional deficiencies, and unsafe childbirththrough the provision of preventative and curative health services. The third is education, which ensures that households develop the requisite skills to navigate the local global economy. The fourth is infrastructure, essential for productivity in every sphere, including power, roads, safe water for drinking and sanitation, phone and Internet connectivity, and port services. The boost of farm production has very often been the deus ex machina that triggers the long term growth process. It is also a process that often starts with outside help, as when the United States funded the initial research and many of the inputs (improved seeds and fertilizer) that went into Indias Green Revolution, which began in the second half of the 1960s. In the urban areas, the initial investment will not support agriculture but rather manufacturing or services. Perhaps the trigger to growth will be improved roads that facilitate trade or an improved port that permits the start of an apparel sector or a power plant that provides vital power for factory production. Whatever the particular investment, the concept is the same: raise productivity above subsistence in order to trigger a self-sustaining process of economic growth.