2016年3月31日木曜日

Pre-TOEFL writing, learning about life by listening to the advice of family and friends or through personal experience

Writing Topic
Some people believe that the best way of learning about life is by listening to the advice of family and friends. Other people believe that the best way of learning about life is through personal experience. Compare the advantages of these two different ways of learning about life. Which do you think is preferable? Use specific examples to support your preference.

Let’s Think
What does “learning about life” mean? Probably it is acquiring information to live a better life such as moral, how to deal with certain things in life, or avoiding certain activities.

Making Sure the Tasks.
Task 1: To compare the advantages of the two ways of learning about life.
Task 2: To decide which way of learning about life is preferable.

Hints for Points
Task 1: To compare the advantages of the two ways of learning about life.
♦ advantages of learning about life from the advice of family and friends:
1.    Family and friends have various perspectives about life.
2.    Many of the people around you have more wisdom than you and help you avoid mistakes because they are older and have more experiences than you.
3.    Family and friends understand you, even more than you, so they give you the best advice for you.

♦advantages of learning about life through personal experience:
1.    First-hand experience is more convincing because it is a real experience.
2.    Lessons learned by yourself are easier to remember.
3.    Believing in your own experience is often makes it easier to try new things.

Task 2: To decide which way of learning about life is preferable.
♦ learning about life from the advice of family and friends
1.    It is wise to consult (with) others for advice to be successful in life.
2.    Man is a social animal. We are made to help each other to lead a happy life.

learning about life through personal experience
1.    I would like to do anything by myself.
2.    I learn things better when I do it actively by myself.


Sample Essay Structure
Introduction = OutlineBoth learning about life by listening to family and friends and doing it through personal experience have advantages, but I would rather ask for advice.
family and friendsTwo heads are better than one.
personal experiencePersonal experience helps you learn things better.
my preferenceLearning something the hard way often costs too much.
Conclusion = Wrap-upLife is short and advice from others will save you from many losses.

♦Your Sample Essay Structure
Introduction = Outline

family and friends


personal experience


my preference


Conclusion = Wrap-up


Sample Paragraph Development of personal experience in Sample Essay Structure
Main IdeaPersonal experience helps you learn things better.
ExplanationReality makes you learn something quickly and forever.
ExampleFor example, when you greet a new person in your neighborhood and make good friends with the person, you learn that greeting a stranger is important and keep doing it the rest of your life.
Follow upYour parents can tell you the importance of good manners hundreds of times but it is often when you taste their goodness that you start exercising them actively.
ConclusionBy actually trying as many things as you can, you learn about life deeply.

♦Your test paragraph development:
Main Idea

Explanation


Example



Follow up



Conclusion



2016年3月29日火曜日

TOEFL, iBT, Independent Writing, Which is more important, first-hand experience or knowledge from books? - rewrite -

Writing Topic
Some people stress the importance of learning from books, while others feel that first-hand experience is far more important and valid than knowledge gained from books. Discuss the differences between the two sources of learning and compare the merits of knowledge obtained from experience and that gained from books. Which source do you feel is more important, and why?

Let’s think
The second sentence of this writing topic gives you two assignments. You are required to 1) tell the difference between the two types of learning described in the first sentence and 2) compare the good things about knowledge gained from them. The last sentence is a question about which is more important. Thus, as well as writing about the source you think is more important, you are supposed to deal with the other way, which means that you have to deal with both.

To learn and grow, most of us depend on both hands-on experience and information from books, and prioritize either or both depending on what you want to know and the conditions you are in. In science classes, teachers start with reminding students of some experience or actually making them experience a phenomenon and then move on to inquiry, assumption and research and experiment. But you might not want to experiment with all the elements on the periodic table unless you want to be a chemist. Reading is enough and efficient to gain general knowledge about them, especially when some of them have very nasty properties. In the same way, if you want to know what it is like to be on Mars, you will do some research on Mars because you cannot go to the planet and see and feel the actual environment there. You read history books because most of the things in the past do not remain in the present world. On the other hand, if you are interested in skiing, you might give it a try and see what it is like to go down the snow slope with long thin boards. The feel of the activity cannot be learned without actually doing it. Also, things like culture, language, or human relationships are learned mainly through real experiences with them.

Now what about the relative importance of experience and information from books in sympathizing others, which is a most important property as a human, in issues such as globalization? The subject has many aspects and people who read have a lot to talk about it. However, if they have never put their feet into the shoes of the countless numbers of people suffering from its results, it could hardly be said that they really know what globalization is. On the other hand, if you have made friends with someone whose father has lost his job because of free trade treaties, which is the driving force of globalization, you would sincerely feel that something is wrong with this on-going change and might feel the urge to do something. However, if you do not read, you would not see the whole picture of globalization and would never know what is causing its problems and how it can be dealt with. Furthermore, if people who have seen only the good results of globalization never read about bad results of it, they might not question the goodness of globalization. In these cases, it seems that reading supplements experience which is the main source of our decisions.

Hints for points
♦learning from books: Humankind has dominated the earth by sharing knowledge, and revolutions related to information-sharing always expanded our ranges of activities. Gaining knowledge by reading is taking advantage of the shared assets of information humans accumulated through thousands of years. The merits of knowledge gained by reading are …
1.    it is of wider-range (comprehensive), and relatively less slanted (less personal. less partial) and more accurate than knowledge based on personal experiences.
2.    it is knowledge about things that cannot be learned by actually experiencing them.
3.    it is gained in rather short time compared to actually trying everything.

♦learning through experience: As saying goes, seeing is believing. Hands-on experience is the data obtained by your own senses and processed by yourself. In terms of reality, no other information can beat your own experience. The merits of the knowledge obtained through experience are …
1.    it is convincing to you and stays in your memory easily and forever. It is connected to your heart.
2.    it motivates you to learn more or to take actions from the bottom of your heart.
3.    it is often not written in books and cannot be copied by others.

♦reasoning of why you think one is more important than the other
1.    personal experience
Your decision on which is more importantI think knowledge from experience is more important because it is a pure sense data and without it you cannot organize and process other information.
CounterargumentKnowledge gained from experience lacks balance in terms of forming a more accurate picture, but as long as you keep supplementing it by reading or listening to others, you have less chance of becoming biased and making bad decisions.
ConclusionLearning is difficult without motivation, which is kindled by experience. Thus, experience is more important than books for you to approach study actively.

2.    books
Your decision on which is more importantKnowledge from experience is destined to be wrong because an individual can see only part of the whole picture and processes it alone. We read books to make up for this demerit and avoid failure caused by ignorance. For example, people without the experience of war may have wars if not informed of it more easily than those who are informed.
CounterargumentInformation provided by books can be wrong, but since it has usually been exposed to examinations of more than one heads, it is closer to the truth than information held by one head.
Conclusion Books are more important than experience as they help good understanding.

3.    both
Your decision on which is more importantKnowledge based on experience and that from books compensate for each other. It is difficult to know something without a real contact with it, but it is also difficult to comprehend it well without reading.
CounterargumentSome scientists and artists come up with great ideas with scant experience related to it. However, they are exceptional people with extraordinary imagination that enables them to experience reality through reading, and their imagination has developed from their experiences. No one can form an idea without sense data, which is experience. On the other hand, it is true that there exist people who leave great works without any proper education, but the assumption is that they could have been even more successful had they had more resources in the field of their interest other than their own personal experiences.
ConclusionBoth books and experiences are necessary to build a well-rounded view on something.


Your full essay structure
Introduction

Merits of knowledge gained from books


Merits of knowledge gained from experience


Your decision on which is more important


Counterargument


Conclusion



Essay for Ideas and Expressions

Barron’s Writing for the TOEFL iBT, p. 248

2016年3月28日月曜日

国際教養AO入試 reference, media downplaying Sanders doing much better than Clinton

A Dozen Reasons Sanders Voters Are Justifiably Angry at the Media Right Now
HUffpost Politcs 03/25/2016
http://www.huffingtonpost.com/seth-abramson/20-reasons-sanders-voters-are-justifiably-angry_b_9544744.html

Media Unimpressed as Sanders Barely Gets Seventy Per Cent of Vote
BY ANDY BOROWITZ   The New Yorker   MARCH 28, 2016http://www.newyorker.com/humor/borowitz-report/media-unimpressed-as-sanders-barely-gets-seventy-per-cent-of-vote

《reference》
Bernie Sanders 'put a bird on it' at Portland rally 
The Oregonian
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Jc2TVLoxsDA

2016年3月25日金曜日

TOEFL, iBT, Independent Writing, We should be willing to change a decision we have already made if the situation and circumstances change. - rewrite -

Writing Topic:  Consider the following statement. We should be willing to change a decision we have already made if the situation and circumstances change. Do you agree with this idea? Support your response by including specific reasons and examples.


Let’s Think
It is often said that you should not change a decision once you have made it while it is also true that you have to be flexible about your decision to survive in this ever-changing world. But the statement goes “We should be willing to change a decision“, not “We should change a decision”. Probably, in many circumstances, it is appropriate to be ready to admit mistakes and conform to the new circumstance, while there might be cases in which you should be careful or even stubborn.


Hints for Points
Agree:
1.    Although it is difficult and often scary to change a decision once you have made, doing it will often save you. Many organizations lost much of their resources because of inertia. History fans may cite countless examples such as war-time tragedies caused by sticking too much to a wrong decision.

2.    Admitting bad decisions helps development. Policies in scientific research should be revised when it is proved to be wrong. Authoritarianism prevents some developing countries from advancing in science and technology. Their culture prohibits questioning the decisions made by the seniors.

3.    When the focus is money, readiness to change decisions is a virtue. Business policies are reviewed every quarter for adjustment. Every three months, businesses assess whether they have been keeping up with the projections they have made and if necessary, they immediately change the policy.

Disagree:
1.    You think more than once before you make a decision but once you have made it, you should stick with it. Bad situation may be over in a few more efforts, or the circumstance might change again and you might regret giving up so easily.

2.    Time solves problems in many cases such as problems in relationships. Although it is important for people to be honest with their feelings, people change as they go through many events, become mature, and understand more about each other. Willingly terminating a relationship may not be wise.

3.    Sticking with something to the end in itself has some significance. Doing something to the last is in itself an accomplishment. People respect those who make it to the end for their determination and courage to take responsibility of what they have set out to do. Following through something by staying the course, managing the difficulties, and taking the damage done into stride, takes on something holy around it.

4.    Something like a key code in a constitution should not be willingly changed.  e.g. Article 9


Essay Structure
Introduction = OutlineI almost agree with the statement that we should be willing to change a decision we have already made if the situation and circumstances change.
Point 1Readiness to admit mistakes and change decisions saves a lot of resources and lives. 
e.g. scientific research, decisions of huge organizations
Point 2However, being opportunistic sometimes backfires us. 
e.g. another change of situation, losing trust
Point 3 / Counterargument-treatmentIn some cases, changing a decision can cost something very important.  e.g. relationship, faith
Conclusion = Wrap-upAdjusting to a new reality is necessary as long as it does not cost more important things in life.


♦Your Sample Essay Structure
Introduction = Outline

Point 1

Point 2

Point 3 / Counterargument-treatment
               

Conclusion = Wrap-up



Sample Paragraph Development of Point 3 in Sample Essay Structure
Main IdeaIn some cases, changing a decision can cost something very important.
ExplanationThere seem to be things more important than success or even life.
Detail / Example in generalMany people stick to a failed relationship or unsuccessful project to the end.
More Specific Detail / ExampleSome women stay with their husband who call them “stupid” for decades till they die, but they may have been happier than they had given up their husband. The great explorer Scott did not stop his exploration in the Antarctic because carrying out his mission was more important to him than reaching the Pole first and coming back alive, and he is still admired for it.
Follow-up / Counterargument-treatmentFor many, these behaviors appear futile, but life is more profound than our understanding and god works in strange ways. A smart move might not always be wise or satisfying.
ConclusionIt might be significant to abide by your decision for something more important than what you lose for it.


♦Your Sample Paragraph Development
Main Idea


Explanation



 Detail / Example in general




More Specific Detail / Example



Follow-up / Counterargument-treatment



Conclusion



2016年3月22日火曜日

Pre-TOEFL writing, What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age?

Writing Topic
What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Hints for Points
1.    more facilities for entertainment/study/networking
2.    buildings and streets with better appearances
3.    better transportation systems
4.    scholarship program/free tuition

Sample Essay Structure
Introduction = OutlineMaking streets look more attractive would help attract the young.
Point 1Making the streets cleaner would make them more likable to the young.
Point 2I would also like new bulletin boards to be placed in some corners for information exchange.
Point 3Appearance is not everything, but the first impression counts and streets are the face of the town.
Conclusion = Wrap-upI would like to make the streets of my hometown more beautiful and exciting.

♦Your Sample Essay Structure
Introduction = Outline

Point 1


Point 2


Point 3 / Counterargument-treatment


Conclusion = Wrap-up



Sample Paragraph Development of Point 1 in Sample Essay Structure
Main IdeaMaking the streets cleaner would make them more likable to the young.
ExplanationYoung people, mostly young women, are sensitive to cleanliness.
ExampleEveryone knows that there are few people in filthy places even during the day. I myself, for example, stay away from a street with cigarette butts and plastic bags.
Follow upRegulation would not be necessary. Putting up posters with humor or making a project as part of education may work.
ConclusionAs the saying goes, cleanliness is next to godliness. Not only the young but also all the other generations will like my hometown if it is cleaner.

♦Your test paragraph development:
Main Idea

Explanation


Example



Follow up



Conclusion


2016年3月20日日曜日

TOEFL, iBT, Independent Writing, What would you like to know about the future? - rewrite -

Writing Topic
Imagine that you had the power to know one thing about the future. What would you choose to learn and why? Offer specific reasons and details to support your choice.


Let’s Think
One of the main characters of the Sci-fi classic, Back to the Future, who accidentally visits the future buys a copy of almanac to learn some future information for gambling to get rich after coming back to the present. The leading character, on the other hand, tries to solve his own problem, the cause of his failure in the future. What is your main concern about the future? What makes you concerned about it? Would it benefit you to learn the information? In another recent sci-fi short story, Sibyl by Deborah Walker, the future teller with the name goes, “You can’t change the past; (you can change) only the future”.

The following might serve as some cues for your thought:
My main concern about the future is related to …
1.    the environment: climate change, endangered species, etc.
2.    the world: nuclear war, future geopolitical map, globalization, next disaster, etc.
3.    technology: medicine, cloning, robotics, space exploration, etc.
4.    culture: fashion, language, food, sports, etc.

Hints for Points
1.    Will my favorite species have gone extinct in the future? Will the energy policy go well?
2.    Which contemporary figures will be admired in the future?
3.    What kind of music will the future people be listening to?
4.    Will Japan national football team win the World Cup someday?
5.    How will the earth/our species end? When will I die?


Essay Structure
♦Sample essay structure in the case that you have two or three reasons to support your argument
Sample 1
Introduction = OutlineI would like to know how the language of Japan, where I live, will have changed.
Point 1The government is focused on the English education.
Point 2The Japanese society is shifting to a less homogenous one.
Point 3 / Counterargument-treatmentMy country has Japanized foreign elements throughout its history as Shuichi Kato points out in his book on the history of Japanese literature. However, with globalization in rapid progress, the language will be affected a lot.
Conclusion = Wrap-upNo matter how unfamiliar a language we may be speaking, I would like the soft and warm heart to be kept in the people.

Sample 2
Introduction = OutlineI would like to know whether I would be “happy” in the future.
Point 1I want to know whether I am on the right track now.
Point 2I would like to avert a crisis by learning the factors that can cause it.
Point 3 / Counterargument-treatmentWhile it is difficult to define what happiness is, there seems to be some range of life that we can call a happy life.
Conclusion = Wrap-upThe accumulation of the present is the future, so that making my present life happier can make my future happier.

♦Your Sample Essay Structure
Introduction = Outline

Point 1

Point 2

Point 3 / Counterargument-treatment

Conclusion = Wrap-up


Sample Paragraph Development
♦Sample Paragraph Development of Point 1 in Sample 2
Main IdeaI want to know whether I am on the right track now.
ExplanationI do not know what I am doing for the future will really make me happy.
Detail / Example in general For example, I spend most of my time doing what I believe is the best thing to do for my future, but I sometimes feel that I should be doing something totally different.
More Specific Detail / ExampleI spend most of my time studying and doing club activities to keep the record of my school life good. However, life might not unfold as planned and I might be missing something crucial to make me really happy. I might be happier in the future, for instance, if I traveled around the world as often as I can or read all day every day instead of studying all the time even during vacations.
Follow-up / Counterargument-treatmentI know that money and happiness don’t grow on trees and all play and no work makes Jack jobless, but I am not sure whether I will be really happy by doing what is not making me really happy now.
ConclusionI would like to know whether my future-self would be benefitting from my present lifestyle.


♦Your Sample Paragraph Development
Main Idea


Explanation



 Detail / Example in general




More Specific Detail / Example





Follow-up / Counterargument-treatment




Conclusion






Pre-TOEFL writing, What do you do for good health?

Writing Topic
People do many different things to stay healthy. What do you do for good health? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Hints for Points
To stay healthy I …
1.    stay relaxed and try not to worry much, for illness starts in the mind.
2.    regularly exercise to speed up the metabolism
3.    watch what I eat because you are what you eat
4.    avoid oily food, which will increases your fat.
5.    eat less salty food since too much salt raises blood pressure
6.    reduce consumption of sugar, which is toxic and can cause cancer.
7.    eat a lot of vegetables and fruit, for they provide good gut bacteria
8.    go on a diet once in a while to purify my blood.
9.    keep early hours and sleep well to be mentally and physically sound.

Sample Essay Structure
Introduction = OutlineI do several things good for the health.
Point 1I laugh a lot because laughing activates our immune system.
Point 2I try to walk up the stairs instead of taking the elevator every day for the obvious reason.
Point 3I eat and drink in moderation because many centenarians say they do it for longevity.
Conclusion = Wrap-upI always try to be in a cheerful mood, be physically active, and refrain from eating too much to stay fit. All in all, I abide by the common sense.

♦Your Sample Essay Structure
Introduction = Outline

Point 1


Point 2


Point 3 / Counterargument-treatment


Conclusion = Wrap-up



Sample Paragraph Development of Point 1 in Sample Essay Structure
Main IdeaI laugh a lot and this seems to be good for my health.
ExplanationIt is said that laughing activates our immune system.
ExampleAlthough not because of this information, it seems that I am always seeking something funny. For example, when I feel down, I try to find something funny about myself. Why do I forget so many important things while I still remember my friend forgetting my birthday? I smile ironically, and then the smile lightens my heart. I also watch stand-up comedy and laugh out loud. Comedians often take up disagreeable things or people and ridicule them. This makes me feel refreshed from the bottom of my heart.
Follow upOf course even a most hilarious joke cannot cure an illness, but they can relieve some pain.
ConclusionNot only an apple but also a smile a day keeps the doctor away.

♦Your test paragraph development:
Main Idea

Explanation


Example



Follow up

Conclusion