2026年9月20日日曜日

TOEFL iBT Cigarette ban (Revised)

 

Should cigarettes be banned, or should people be allowed to make their own choices? (public health)

 

 

 

Lets Think

1.        Is there anyone who smokes around you? Do you want them to stop smoking? Why/Why not?

2.        Marijana is now legal in most states of the U.S., and it is legal throughout Netherland. Why?

3.        Is secondhand smoke avoidable completely?

 

Notes:

1)     Ban on cigarettes means that production, sales, and purchase of cigarettes are prohibited by law.

2)     40 years ago, smoking was not a concern in Japan. Many people smoked. They smoked anywhere, anytime, and no one complained. Starbucks was the only shop where smoking was not allowed. In 2003, a law obligating public organizations to prevent passive smoking started, and businesses started to install spaces for non-smokers or those for smokers. Since then, the number of smokers has gradually decreased, and smoking in public areas was banned in 2020.

3)     Marijana is being legalized in countries where the number of users is large mainly to treat users not as criminals but as patients and to eradicate black market, which is run by antisocial groups.

 

 

Hints for Points

Smoking cigarette should be banned:

1.        Cigarettes are toxic and cause cancer and other severe diseases.

2.        It is addictive.

3.        There is the problem of second-hand smoke/smoking.

4.        Smokers’ families lose them twice. They first lose them when the smoker refuses to stop smoking despite their begging before the smoker actually dies of a smoking-related disease.

 

Smoking cigarettes should stay legal:

1.        The government has no right to prohibit individual habits. (infringement of freedom)

2.        Only public smoking should be banned.

3.        Smokers will be stressed out and resort to other harmful substances if smoking is banned.

4.        Banning will make cigarettes go underground just like what happened in the Great Prohibition and after cannabis ban.

 

 

Ideas and Expressions  

ThesisAlthough I partly agree with Sophia in that second-hand smoking must be prevented for public health by any means necessary, I am skeptical of the legitimacy of banning cigarette smoking.

Supporting DetailsAlthough the government must protect public health and therefore must ban harmful substances like poisonous drugs, cigarettes are not so harmful as banned substances. Specifically, it has little immediate adverse effect on the user or those around them compared to heavy drugs like heroin or cocaine. Cigarettes are among the non-essential items like sugar and alcohol, which are as harmful as or more harmful than cigarettes. These products have been around us humans as part of our lives and culture for millennia, and they are closely intertwined with sense of happiness and identity. For example, students in the old days learned how to smoke from their intimate seniors, hence the habit later being associated with memories of their youth. Ban on cigarettes will take away the virtues related to them from the users. This is a violation of freedom to pursue happiness. Decisions on whether to take health risks in exchange for indulgence should be left to individual decisions. Governments are not authorized to intervene an individual’s habit of smoking.

Counterargument-treatmentSecond-hand smoke can be avoided by banning public smoking. Families of smokers can also avoid the smoke by asking the smoker to smoke in the back yard or on the terrace. Education on adverse effects of smoking and regulation of excessive advertisements will help increase awareness.

ConclusionActivities, including smoking, in private spaces are at the discretion of individuals, and therefore, total ban on cigarettes is overregulation. (266 words)

 


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2026年9月12日土曜日

TOEFL iBT Should we be pushing young people to take more risks, or should we emphasize cautioninstead? (Revised)

Should we be pushing young people to take more risks, or should we emphasize caution instead?

 

 

Let’s Think

1.        Name examples of risk-taking.

2.        Would you give it a go with the following cases? Why/why not?

a.     Choosing to be a professional athlete, musician, artist, or writer instead of studying for higher education

b.     Going abroad for a year after graduation instead of taking a very good job offer

c.      Confessing your love to someone

d.     Starting a business

3.        Share your experience that is similar to Lily’s point: Taking a risk leads to personal growth.

4.        Have you ever been persuaded not to take a risk? Share the story with others. What were the concerns?

 

 

Hints for Points

Taking risks

1.        Nothing ventured, nothing gained.

2.        It is only when you are young that you can take risks.

3.        By taking risks, young people will grow whether they fail or not.

4.        You live only once.

5.        One of the greatest regret of elderlies is that they did not challenge something while young.

6.        Precarious life is stressful.

 

Exercising caution

1.        Slow and steady wins the race.

2.        Learning to make an informed decision is important to be successful.

3.        One should prioritize protecting what has been proved secure and beneficial.

4.        Loss of opportunities might happen, for luck and fun are often something new and strange.

5.        Young people tend to be reckless, so they need to be told to think twice before actually doing something risky.

6.        “Enter through the narrow gate. For wide is the gate and broad is the road that leads to destruction.” Matthew 7: 13-14

 

 

Ideas and Expressions  

ThesisI believe that it is irresponsible for adults to encourage young people to take risks because risk-taking is gambling, a trap that seems easy and exciting.

Supporting DetailsVery often, what is called risk-taking is a premature action done by skipping the process of rigorous research, meticulous planning, and robust and patient execution of the plan, which are the practices that are imperative for success. Young people must train themselves through these practices to gain enough knowledge and skills for their goals. In addition, successful adventure depends on experience, but, as James points out, young people lack adequate experience to take a risk. They should wait and learn until they are ready to take up the challenge they cannot escape when the time is ripe.

Counterargument-treatmentLily’s point that taking a risk can lead to personal growth sounds valid. Taking responsibility of the action and wider perspective and confidence gained through new experiences nurture well-rounded and resourceful personality, whether the person wins succeeds in an attempt or not. However, venturing also involves a huge loss when the challenger fails. For example, failing to establish a business will leave the person with a huge debt, sense of loss, regret, and feeling of inferiority. They may also lose their family and friends. Very strong will power and discipline are necessary to overcome the predicament, and most people are not so strong and become real losers, who give up their life. Moreover, victory at an early age has a negative impact on the person’s life as it makes the person and conceited, even if the success was greatly due to luck. Personal growth stops, and depravation follows.

ConclusionIn the end, slow but steady is the best policy. Real chances will come to those who are ready to grab it after their enough efforts. (297 words)

 


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2026年9月6日日曜日

TOEFL iBT Wriging for an Academic Discussion Buying a House or Renting an Apartment? (Revised)

Should individuals prioritize buying a home or renting an apartment? (Economics)

 

 

Let’s Think

1.        What are the disadvantages of having a house?

2.        What are the disadvantages of renting an apartment?

3.        What is the decisive reason for choosing one over the other?

 

Note: If you pay $800 a month as a rent for an average apartment for 50 years, you’ll pay $480,000, which is a little more than the cost of an average house. If you buy a house and cannot pay for it in cash, you pay your monthly mortgage that lasts about 30 years. Sometimes, the mortgage rate rises. If you cannot pay for it, you will get evicted.

 

 

Hints for Points

Renting an apartment

You have more usable money left in the bank as you don’t pay for the furniture and goods for the house.

It provides mobility, or flexibility as Ben says.

It is the best lifestyle for a minimalist, who tries to keep their possessions at a minimum.

When we die, we can take nothing with us, so it is better for us to have as little property as possible while we are alive.

You have to consider your neighbors more when in an apartment than when you are in a house.

You cannot renovate your apartment. If you cause damage to it, you have to compensate for the damage.

How comfortable the life living in an apartment depends much on the superintendent.

 

Buying a house

Peace of mind is easier to get because you have autonomy and privacy, as well as a sense of permanence as Tamara points out.

A house has a yard or a garden and can have a garage.

Most people get married and have children, so a house is more preferable.

Pet-owners would be happy to own a house as apartment tenants are usually not allowed to own a pet.

Monthly mortgage payment can be a mental burden.

House prices fluctuate, and it is often risky to own a house if your income is not high and stable. You may go bankrupt if you lose your job after you buy a house or if interest rate soars and your mortgage rate is variable.

 

 

Ideas and Expressions  

ThesisI believe individuals should prioritize living in an apartment unless they plan to have a family because it is better for mental health than living in a house.

Supporting DetailsFirst of all, unless you buy a house in cash, you will be burdened by the mortgage payment for the rest of your life and this will restrict your freedom because you cannot easily quit your job or move to a new place when you want to. The pressure can lead to alcoholism or depression. You may think you can sell your house if you want to, but real estate usually depreciates like any other tangible commodities unless it sits on land in a prestigious area. Also, living in a house tends to make you materialistic and possessed with consumerism, since few people can stand leaving extra rooms vacant. When you get in a house, you buy pieces of furniture to fit in the new rooms and fill the furniture with the content. You may also buy paintings and plants to decorate the rooms. As a result, homeowners spend money and time on the consumption of household goods, while they could spend that much for other purposes such as hobby, relationships, or traveling if they lived in an apartment.

Counterargument-treatmentThe stability of life and the abundance which living in a house provides cannot be expected in life in an apartment, However, stability will turn mannerism, and abundance is equal to consumerism and corruption. Apartment life is free from the cost of settlement.

ConclusionWhether to choose materialistic life or not depends on individual values in the end, but I think people will be happier when they are free from anxiety and greed, which follows the goal of economics. Therefore, individuals should choose to live in an apartment. (294 words)

 


Write your draft. Then read each other’s draft, asking questions and making counterarguments.

 

                                                   DRAFT