2026年9月12日土曜日

TOEFL iBT Should we be pushing young people to take more risks, or should we emphasize cautioninstead? (Revised)

Should we be pushing young people to take more risks, or should we emphasize caution instead?

 

 

Let’s Think

1.        Name examples of risk-taking.

2.        Would you give it a go with the following cases? Why/why not?

a.     Choosing to be a professional athlete, musician, artist, or writer instead of studying for higher education

b.     Going abroad for a year after graduation instead of taking a very good job offer

c.      Confessing your love to someone

d.     Starting a business

3.        Share your experience that is similar to Lily’s point: Taking a risk leads to personal growth.

4.        Have you ever been persuaded not to take a risk? Share the story with others. What were the concerns?

 

 

Hints for Points

Taking risks

1.        Nothing ventured, nothing gained.

2.        It is only when you are young that you can take risks.

3.        By taking risks, young people will grow whether they fail or not.

4.        You live only once.

5.        One of the greatest regret of elderlies is that they did not challenge something while young.

6.        Precarious life is stressful.

 

Exercising caution

1.        Slow and steady wins the race.

2.        Learning to make an informed decision is important to be successful.

3.        One should prioritize protecting what has been proved secure and beneficial.

4.        Loss of opportunities might happen, for luck and fun are often something new and strange.

5.        Young people tend to be reckless, so they need to be told to think twice before actually doing something risky.

6.        “Enter through the narrow gate. For wide is the gate and broad is the road that leads to destruction.” Matthew 7: 13-14

 

 

Ideas and Expressions  

ThesisI believe that it is irresponsible for adults to encourage young people to take risks because risk-taking is gambling, a trap that seems easy and exciting.

Supporting DetailsVery often, what is called risk-taking is a premature action done by skipping the process of rigorous research, meticulous planning, and robust and patient execution of the plan, which are the practices that are imperative for success. Young people must train themselves through these practices to gain enough knowledge and skills for their goals. In addition, successful adventure depends on experience, but, as James points out, young people lack adequate experience to take a risk. They should wait and learn until they are ready to take up the challenge they cannot escape when the time is ripe.

Counterargument-treatmentLily’s point that taking a risk can lead to personal growth sounds valid. Taking responsibility of the action and wider perspective and confidence gained through new experiences nurture well-rounded and resourceful personality, whether the person wins succeeds in an attempt or not. However, venturing also involves a huge loss when the challenger fails. For example, failing to establish a business will leave the person with a huge debt, sense of loss, regret, and feeling of inferiority. They may also lose their family and friends. Very strong will power and discipline are necessary to overcome the predicament, and most people are not so strong and become real losers, who give up their life. Moreover, victory at an early age has a negative impact on the person’s life as it makes the person and conceited, even if the success was greatly due to luck. Personal growth stops, and depravation follows.

ConclusionIn the end, slow but steady is the best policy. Real chances will come to those who are ready to grab it after their enough efforts. (297 words)

 


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2026年9月6日日曜日

TOEFL iBT Wriging for an Academic Discussion Buying a House or Renting an Apartment? (Revised)

Should individuals prioritize buying a home or renting an apartment? (Economics)

 

 

Let’s Think

1.        What are the disadvantages of having a house?

2.        What are the disadvantages of renting an apartment?

3.        What is the decisive reason for choosing one over the other?

 

Note: If you pay $800 a month as a rent for an average apartment for 50 years, you’ll pay $480,000, which is a little more than the cost of an average house. If you buy a house and cannot pay for it in cash, you pay your monthly mortgage that lasts about 30 years. Sometimes, the mortgage rate rises. If you cannot pay for it, you will get evicted.

 

 

Hints for Points

Renting an apartment

You have more usable money left in the bank as you don’t pay for the furniture and goods for the house.

It provides mobility, or flexibility as Ben says.

It is the best lifestyle for a minimalist, who tries to keep their possessions at a minimum.

When we die, we can take nothing with us, so it is better for us to have as little property as possible while we are alive.

You have to consider your neighbors more when in an apartment than when you are in a house.

You cannot renovate your apartment. If you cause damage to it, you have to compensate for the damage.

How comfortable the life living in an apartment depends much on the superintendent.

 

Buying a house

Peace of mind is easier to get because you have autonomy and privacy, as well as a sense of permanence as Tamara points out.

A house has a yard or a garden and can have a garage.

Most people get married and have children, so a house is more preferable.

Pet-owners would be happy to own a house as apartment tenants are usually not allowed to own a pet.

Monthly mortgage payment can be a mental burden.

House prices fluctuate, and it is often risky to own a house if your income is not high and stable. You may go bankrupt if you lose your job after you buy a house or if interest rate soars and your mortgage rate is variable.

 

 

Ideas and Expressions  

ThesisI believe individuals should prioritize living in an apartment unless they plan to have a family because it is better for mental health than living in a house.

Supporting DetailsFirst of all, unless you buy a house in cash, you will be burdened by the mortgage payment for the rest of your life and this will restrict your freedom because you cannot easily quit your job or move to a new place when you want to. The pressure can lead to alcoholism or depression. You may think you can sell your house if you want to, but real estate usually depreciates like any other tangible commodities unless it sits on land in a prestigious area. Also, living in a house tends to make you materialistic and possessed with consumerism, since few people can stand leaving extra rooms vacant. When you get in a house, you buy pieces of furniture to fit in the new rooms and fill the furniture with the content. You may also buy paintings and plants to decorate the rooms. As a result, homeowners spend money and time on the consumption of household goods, while they could spend that much for other purposes such as hobby, relationships, or traveling if they lived in an apartment.

Counterargument-treatmentThe stability of life and the abundance which living in a house provides cannot be expected in life in an apartment, However, stability will turn mannerism, and abundance is equal to consumerism and corruption. Apartment life is free from the cost of settlement.

ConclusionWhether to choose materialistic life or not depends on individual values in the end, but I think people will be happier when they are free from anxiety and greed, which follows the goal of economics. Therefore, individuals should choose to live in an apartment. (294 words)

 


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2026年8月23日日曜日

TOEFL iBT Wriging for an Academic Discussion Should school prioritize teaching children how to be creative? (Revised)

The necessity of teaching creativity in schools is a topic of considerable debate, especially in our rapidly evolving world. Some argue that fostering creativity is essential for preparing children for future challenges and opportunities, while others believe that traditional academic subjects should take precedence to ensure a solid educational foundation. What is your opinion on this issue? Should schools prioritize teaching children how to be creative? Why or why not?

 

 

 

Let’s Read and Think

Read the following articles, underlined by yours truly Sasaki, to see what creativity is and how it can be learned.

 

Article 1 Medical students 'raised on screens lack skills for surgery'

Leading surgeon says lack of hobbies and creativity in schools has affected children’s practical abilities

Matthew Weaver  Oct 2018  The Guardian

   New medical students have spent so much time on screens that they lack vital practical skills necessary to conduct life-saving operations, a leading surgeon has warned.

   Roger Kneebone, professor of surgical education at Imperial College London, said that a decline in hands-on creative subjects at school and practical hobbies at home means that students often do not have a basic understanding of the physical world.

   Backing a campaign by educational thinktank the Edge Foundation to encourage more creative subjects in the national curriculum, Kneebone said spending hours engaged in virtual worlds was no substitute for experience in the real world.

   “Partly it stops [students] being aware in three dimensions of what’s going on around them, because their focus is much narrower, but also it takes away that physical understanding you get by actually doing things,” he told BBC Radio 5 Live. “That has to be done in the real world with real stuff.”

   Kneebone said there had been a “very serious knock-on effect” on practical skills among students since smartphones had become so popular.

   He said: “We have noticed that medical students and trainee surgeons often don’t seem as comfortable with doing things with their hands … than they used to even perhaps five or 10 years ago.

   “People are no longer getting the same exposure to making and doing [things] when they are at home, when they are school, as they used to.”

   He claimed that cutting back on creative subjects at school had a negative impact on the tactile skills necessary for a career in medicine or science.

   Kneebone said: “We are talking about the ability to do things with your hands, with tools, cutting things out and putting things together … which is really important in order to do the right thing either with operations, or with experiments. You need to understand how hard you can pull things before you do damage to them or how quickly you can do things with them before they change in some way.”

   Kneebone said that by spending time online children were missing out on practical skills acquired from hobbies such as cooking, woodwork, playing a musical instrument or model making. He endorsed making Halloween jack-o’-lanterns as a start for budding surgeons.

   He said: “Pumpkin carving is one example of using sharp instruments with great delicacy and precision on a hard surface with a soft inside to create something that you have got in your mind and then you have to make it happen.”

 

 

Article 2 The Guardian view on creativity in schools: a missing ingredient

Imagination should infuse teaching of science as well as the arts. Children are not pitchers to be filled with facts   Oct 2019

 

You can’t see it, smell it, hear it. People disagree on how, precisely, to define it, or where, exactly, it comes from. It isn’t a school subject or an academic discipline, but it can be learned. It is a quality that is required by artists. But it is also present in the lives of scientists and entrepreneurs. All of us benefit from it: we thrive mentally and spiritually when we are able to harness it. It is a delicate thing, easily stamped out; in fact, it flourishes most fully when people are playful and childlike. At the same time, it works best in tandem with deep knowledge and expertise.

   This mysterious – but teachable – quality is creativity, the subject of a report published this week by Durham Commission on Creativity and Education, a body chaired by Sir Nicholas Serota, the chair of Arts Council England, with input from figures including film director Beeban Kidron, architect Sir David Adjaye and choreographer Akram Khan. The report, put together in collaboration with academics from Durham University, concludes that creativity is not something that should inhabit the school curriculum only as it relates to drama, music, art and other obviously creative subjects, but that creative thinking ought to run through all of school life, infusing the way human and natural sciences are learned.

   The authors, who focus on education in England, offer a number of sensible recommendations, some of which are an attempt to alleviate the Gradgrindish turn in education policy of recent years. When children are regarded as pitchers to be filled with facts, creativity does not prosper; nor does it when teachers’ sole objective is, perforce, coaching children towards exams. One suggestion from the commission is a network of teacher-led “creativity collaboratives”, along the lines of existing maths hubs, with the aim of supporting teaching for creativity through the school curriculum.

   Nevertheless, it is arts subjects through which creativity can most obviously be fostered. The value placed on them by the independent education sector is clear. One only has to look at the remarkable arts facilities at Britain’s top public schools to comprehend this. But in the state sector the EBacc’s focus on English, maths and science threatens to crush arts subjects; meantime, reduced school budgets mean dwindling extracurricular activities. There has been a 28.1% decline in uptake of creative subjects at GCSE since 2014, though happily, art and design have seen a recent uptick.

   This disparity between state and private is a matter of social justice. It is simply wrong and unfair that most children have a fraction of the access to choirs, orchestras, art studios and drama that their most privileged peers enjoy. As lives are affected by any number of looming challenges – climate crisis, automation in the workplace – humans are going to need creative thinking more than ever. For all of our sakes, creativity in education, and for all, must become a priority.

 

 

Hints for Points

Creativity

1.       Whether one is creative or not will be crucial in the near future as it will be vital to cope with the impacts of climate change and more jobs will be taken care of by AI.

2.       Real creativity comes from real contact with nature, people, and society.

3.       Establishment of individuality is necessary for society to evolve.

 

Academic subjects

1.        Creativity requires solid foundation, essential knowledge and skills. To create something new, you need to know what has already been created. What you think is new might already exist.

2.        Breakthrough in science often comes from interdisciplinary studies, integration of academic studies.

3.        School is the place to teach academic subjects. Children learn creativity outside school, while school teaches academic subjects better than anything else.

 

 

Sample Responses

Disagree

ThesisAlthough I agree with Meg in that creativity is the inspiration that is the key to solve difficult problems and come up with new ideas, I don’t think school should prioritize teaching creativity because in my view, school cannot teach creativity. It is not a subject. Thus, I think school should prioritize providing quality education of academic subjects for children, while reducing school hours and homework, to help their natural development of creativity.

CreativityCreativity is not something that you learn from school education but something you forget in school. Children are naturally all creative. Yet, once they start school, they lose creativity. Studies to get good scores in examinations of subjects in which they have no interest stunts, I guess, the development of their neurons, which had been budding freely by then. Long school hours and tons of homework reduce their free time that would have helped them develop creativity through interaction with the real world in each individual’s environment.

Academic SubjectsOn the other hand, academic subjects are indispensable to develop and mature a creative mind. They provide knowledge and skills to understand and internalize nature, people, and society in detail and deeply. Teachers should be here to support children do these jobs by providing them with proper materials and assignment.

ConclusionWhat school can do is to teach traditional academic subjects well. Although it is paradoxical, school should not prioritize creativity so that children can grow up to be creative. (239 words)

 

Agree

ThesisI believe school should prioritize teaching children how to be creative.

Supporting DetailsSchool has long been dead and AI has already become smarter than many of us humans. I have no regret to say good-bye to conventional school where children write down what teachers write on the blackboard and cram for examinations, where social norms, or prejudices, of the region are instilled and unnecessary rules are forced to make children obedient and banal, and welcome a new type of school that support children to gain creativity by experiencing various things, such as nature, other cultures, and jobs, because AI cannot fully replicate human experiences and thus this is the area that future humans should explore to coexist with AI.

Counterargument-treatmentAlthough conventional knowledge may be necessary for our creative activities, it is said that all the academic knowledge we need can be found online. As for the question whether school is necessary when creativity can be learned without school, at least public school should exist for equality and ensure that all children get as much experience as possible.

ConclusionTherefore, school should support children to get ready to be humans that can provide their personalized experiences, or individual data, for AI to use to make the world a better place to live, as well as enjoying sharing their precious memories with other humans through creative activities. (223 words)