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TOEFL iBT Independent Writing 1) Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. 2) Would you rather be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business? - rewrite -

 

Writing Topic A

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

 

 

Lets Think

1.       Let’s take a look at the details of the topic. It says, “MOST experiences,” Why does this word is used?

Note: Some experiences, those irreversibly damaging cases like child abuse or disasters, are excluded.

2.       What kind of experiences can we use as examples?

Note: The statement says, “seemed difficult at the time,” and “valuable lessons for the future,” so it is talking about the tough experiences that make you learn something, ranging from your childhood piano lessons to moving to a foreign country to losing your pet.

 

Examples of Harsh Experiences


going abroad

living by yourself

living with a troublesome person

living in poverty

having trouble with someone

fighting a disease

having an injury

being a disaster victim

practicing instrument, sports, etc.

taking a difficult test

failing in a crucial test

starting a project

being in charge of something

being extremely busy

making a serious mistake,

hurting someone,

embarrassing yourself

being misunderstood

being rejected

being betrayed

being bullied

being abused

being discriminated against

losing something or someone



3.      Answer the following questions and tell the answers to your partner or group members.

When and where did you have the experience?  What was tough?  How did you feel then?  How did you deal with it?  How do you feel about the experience now?  What have you learned from it?

 

Hints for Points

1.       We live and learn. We grow as we go through an endless series of difficulties of various degrees.

2.       A tough experience makes you tenacious.

3.       By going through a rough experience, you learn that the world is full of unjust things and that you have to be considerate to others all the more. 

4.       Even the death of your beloved makes you realize that your heart had always been with the person even when you were not with him or her and that the bond is stronger than you thought and will protect you.

 

Essay for Ideas and Expressions   (Barrons, Writing for the TOEFL iBT, p.280)

Your Sample Essay Structure

Introduction

Point 1

Point 2

Point 3

Conclusion

 

Speech Time

Make a one-minute speech on this topic.

 

Sample Paragraph Development

Main IdeaA tough experience makes you tenacious.

Supporting Detail (general)My case is an arduous exercise in my childhood.

Supporting Detail (specific)When I was in my kindergarten, teachers would often take the children to a nearby shrine sitting on top of a hill, which can be called a cliff. To reach the top, we had to walk up long and steep steps made of stones, which were lined straight from the foot to the top of the hill. A few children ran up, followed by most of the others at a slower pace. As a weak child, I toiled in the small group at the end. I felt as if the steps would never end. I was also afraid of my legs giving up in the middle. Then, the labor made me even stop worrying and focus on walking up. Reaching the top gave me relief and I met smiles of some children noticing that I had made it.

Follow-upDecades later, when I was not weak anymore, I went there and did the task. It turned out to be a tough one, even to an adult. I felt for a moment the same fear that I had as a child that I might get stuck in the middle of the stairs. I told myself that I would reach the top if I kept moving my legs, and I realized that I had been telling the same thing to myself since when I climbed the stairs as a child, whenever I was doing something hard. The hard tasks of my kindergarten had given me the lesson that a predicament will end if you do not give up and keep moving on.

ConclusionThis lesson has helped me pull through hardships patiently all my life.

 

Your Sample Paragraph Development

Main Idea                                                                                       

                                                                                                    

Supporting Detail (general)                                                                       

                                                                                                    

Supporting Detail (specific)                                                                        

                                                                                                    

                                                                                                    

                                                                                                    

                                                                                                   

Follow-up                                                                                       

                                                                                                   

                                                                                                   

Conclusion                                                                                      

                                                                                                   

 

Comments or Suggestion from your partner or group members

                                                                                                    

 

Writing Topic B

Some people prefer to work for themselves or own a business. Others prefer to work for an employer. Would you rather be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business? Use specific reasons to explain your choice.

 

 

Lets Think                  

Ask them each other the following questions that can be related to this writing topic.

1)    What is important in your life?

2)    What does work mean in your lifestyle?

3)    What is your characteristic related to work?

 

Ideas and Expressions

1.    Owing a business provides freedom as well as responsibility.

2.    Working for an employer can be stressful, even though you can forget about work once you leave your office.

3.    Being self-employed allows some freedom, but it is basically the same as working for someone else.

 

Essay for Ideas and Expressions

(Barron’s, Writing for the TOEFL iBT, pp.280-281)

 

Sample Essay Structure

Introduction I would rather be an employee than an employer or a freelance.

About Being Your Own BossStarting a new business can help improve the economy.

About Being a FreelanceIt is risky to be a freelance.

My ChoiceI am not interested in running a business.

ConclusionBeing my own boss is not my cup of tea.

 

Your Sample Essay Structure

Introduction = Outline

Point 1

Point 2                                                    

Point 3 / Counterargument-treatment

Conclusion = Wrap-up

 

 

Sample Paragraph Development

A.      Main Idea I am not interested in running a company.

Supporting Detail (general)I have never been a leader and wanted to.

Supporting Detail (specific)”Each individual doing his or her best in his or her position will improve the whole society,” which was a musician’s comment I heard when I was young, has been my motto.

Follow-upBeing a rank-and file does not embarrass me. Society will not run without us.

ConclusionI am happy if I am of any use for a company and can be paid for it.

 

B.      Main Idea Owning a business would give me a lot of freedom in business.

Supporting Detail (general)If you are the boss, you can carry out your idea at your discretion.

Supporting Detail (specific)If you work for an employer, it is almost impossible to put new ideas into practice. You are supposed to do your assignment under the policy decided by the management.

Follow-up This does not mean that I would like to be an autocratic president. Decision-making in business actually involves consultation with other executives because there are many things for a CEO to consider, such as effects to the community or the fate of your employees and clients. The difference is whether I have the right to lead a new project or make a change.

ConclusionI would like to try my ideas in business in my own ways by becoming leader of a company.

 

Your Sample Paragraph Development:

Main Idea                                                                                

                                                                                             

Supporting Detail (general)                                                              

                                                                                            

 

Supporting Detail (specific)                                                               

                                                                                             

                                                                                            

                                                                                            

 

                                                                                             

Follow-up                                                                               

                                                                                            

                                                                                            

Conclusion                                                                               

                                                                                            

 

Comments or Suggestion from your partner or group members

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