Pre-TOEFL Writing What are some of the qualities of a good parent? - revised -

Writing Topic

What are some of the qualities of a good parent? Use specific details and examples to explain your answer.

良い親の性質のいくつかとは何でしょうか？具体的な詳細と例を使って答えを説明して下さい。

 

 

☆Hints for Points　要点のヒント

A good parent …

1.      does not neglect his or her children, and provides necessary care and protection for them.

Many children suffer or die because of neglect.  きちんと世話をする   怠慢により苦しむ子供が沢山いる

2.      guides the child to be independent and helps it (to) join in the society when it is appropriate.

Weaning oneself from one’s child at the right time is important. 適切な時期に自立・社会参加を促す　 子離れする

3.      considers his or her children as independent individuals, not his or her belongings, trying not to control them.

4.      is always attentive and shares thoughts and feelings with the child. いつも注目していて、考えや気持ちを共有する

Sharing information helps the child stay away from problems. 情報共有により子供は問題を避けられる

5.      controls his or her emotions so that the child will not get confused and can feel secure. 感情を制御

Mothers of good students are relaxed and never fail to keep smiling every day.くつろいでいて微笑みを絶やさない

6.      shows good examples for the child to follow. 良いお手本を示す

Imitating is learning. 真似ることは習う事

 

☆Sample Essay Structure 構成例

【Introduction = Outline】A good parent is a good human being. 良い人が良い親

【Point 1】A good parent should have few serious problems. 深刻な問題をほとんど抱えていない

【Point 2】A good parent loves the child in simple ways. 素朴に子供を愛する

【Point 3 / Follow-up】Helping the child (to) have a good future is the goal. 良い将来を得る手助けをするのが目標

【Conclusion = Wrap-up】A good parent plays a role of a good mentor for the child. 良いお手本になる

 

Your Sample Essay Structure

【Introduction = Outline】主張

【Point 1】要点１

【Point 2】要点２

【Point 3 / Counterargument-treatment】要点３または反論処理

【Conclusion = Wrap-up】結論

 

☆Sample Paragraph Development of Point 1 in Sample Essay Structure 段落展開例

【Main Idea】A good parent should have few problems. 問題をほとんど抱えていない

【Explanation】If a parent has a problem, the child will suffer.  親に問題があると子供が苦しむ

【Example】Children of smokers will start smoking at an early age. Abused children will suffer from the trauma and often become abusive to others.  喫煙や虐待により子供は苦しんだり受け継いだりする

【Follow up】No one is perfect, but anyone can try to be perfect. They can try to follow the basic rules in society, give up bad habits, and fight down the impulse. 完全な人はいないが努力はできる

【Conclusion】A good parent transforms himself or herself for the sake of the child. 子供の為に変われる親が良い親

 

Your Sample Paragraph Development

【Main Idea】段落の主張

 

【Explanation】主張の説明

 

【Example】具体例

 

【Follow up】補足

 

【Conclusion】段落の結論