TOEFL iBT Independent Writing Primary education or college education? - revised -

Writing Topic

Do you think it is more worthwhile for the government to spend money on primary education or on college education? Support your response by including specific reasons and examples.

 

☆Let’s think

1         What does the expression “worthwhile for the government” mean?

Note: The expression “worthwhile for the government” means that the government will benefit.

2         How will the government benefit from spending money on children?

3         How will the government benefit from spending money on college students?

 

Note: College is the first four years of university education. It does not mean the research and development conducted by the professors and graduate students, the other of the two main functions of a university.

 

 

☆Ideas and Expressions

Primary education

1.     Spending money on children would benefit the government in the long run because it will narrower the educational gap. Everyone receives the primary education, so it raises the intelligence level of the whole population, who will make good workforce.

 

2.     Good primary education will reduce the number of health and social problems. It will increase the number of children who finish primary education and continue to middle school and higher education. The more educated people are, the less likely to have health and social problems they are.

 

3.     To find more talents, primary education should be subsidized more. Many people who are as good as any successful people are dosing menial jobs because they were not recognized when they were children. They could have contributed to the country if they had received a proper primary education.

 

College education

1.     If the country needs good ideas as soon as possible, it seems more worth spending money on college education than it is to do it on primary education. Smart people pay the money back quickly with great inventions and innovations. Thus, It is efficient to support those who have shown the best academic ability.

 

2.     To revolutionize the whole education system, the government should start with the higher education. To build the country and raise the next generations, governments should subsidize universities to help them change their educational concept and put their ideas into practice.

 

3.     In developing countries, giving the smartest people an intensive higher education is necessary. This will help produce experts as quickly as possible.

 

 

☆Sample Body Structures

Sample Body Structure 1

【Merits of supporting primary education】

【Merits of subsidizing college education】

【Your choice】

Sample Body Structure 2

【Merit of Supporting Primary/college Education 1】

【Merit of Supporting Primary/college Education 2】

【Why merits of the other choice does not matter】

 

Your Sample Essay Structure

【Introduction = Outline】

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【Conclusion = Wrap-up】