Pre-TOEFL Writing, Why do some students study abroad? - rewrite -

Writing Topic

Many students choose to attend schools or universities outside their home countries. Why do some students study abroad? Use specific reasons and details to explain your answer.

多くの学生が母国外の学校や大学に通うことを選択する。なぜ留学する学生がいるのだろう。具体的な理由や詳細を使って答えを説明してください。

☆Let’s Think

What makes them leave their home countries at their early ages? What are the advantages of it?

若い時に母国を離れるのはなぜだろう？利点はなにか？

☆Words and Expressions

1.    Young people are generally curious about what they do not know much about, and when there is a chance to study abroad, they will take it.

若者は好奇心が旺盛だから

2.    Best universities in the world are in foreign countries, manly in Europe and America.

より良い学校・教育

3.    Getting educated all subjects in English will make it easier to be accepted at universities or get a job in a foreign company.

英語による授業により大学進学や就職がしやすくなる

4.    Staying abroad for a long time while one is young will widen one’s views.

若いうちに視野を広げたい

5.    With globalization in progress, familiarity with a foreign country is an advantage.

グローバル化に対応

6.    Language acquisition might be one of the reasons for studying abroad.

言語習得

7.    Student exchange programs encourage students to go back to foreign schools.

交換留学制度により再留学

8.    Some want to contribute to the improvement of the life of those in need and world peace.

困っている人の生活改善と世界平和に貢献したいから

☆Sample Essay Structure

【Introduction = Outline】People attend schools or universities in foreign countries for many different reasons. I think there are three main reasons why some students study abroad.

【Point 1】First, people who go to foreign schools want to get a better education.

【Point 2】Next, students who go overseas want to acquire a good command of English.

【Point 3】Last but not least, students who study abroad want to widen their views.

【Conclusion = Wrap-up】For the reasons above, many students want to study in foreign, especially English-speaking, countries. (To become better-educated, master English, and expand their horizon, many students choose to study overseas.)

【導入＝概要】理由は人それぞれだが主に3つあると思う。

【要点1】良い教育を受けたい。

【要点2】英語の上達。

【要点3】視野を広げたい

【結論＝総括】上記3つの理由で多くの学生が外国特に英語が話されている国に留学したがっている。（より良い教育を受け英語を習得し視野を広げるために多くの学生が海外で勉強することを選択する。）

Your Sample Essay Structure

【Introduction = Outline】

【Point 1】

【Point 2】

【Point 3】

【Conclusion = Wrap-up】

                                                             

☆Sample Paragraph Development for Points in Sample Essay Structure

エッセイ構成例の要点の展開例

Point 1

【Main Idea】People who go to foreign schools want to get a better education.

【Supporting Details】Most of the top 50 universities in the world are in the UK, the USA or other English-speaking countries. Many schools in those areas implement advanced teaching methods and the students perform well on academic achievement tests.

【Wrap-up】It is natural that parents try to send their children to one of the good schools in the world if conditions allow them to.

【主張】留学する人は良い教育を受けたがっている。

【詳細】世界ランク50位以内のほとんどの大学はイギリスやアメリカやその他の英語圏の国にある。多くが進んだ教授法を実施し学生の成績もよい。

【まとめ】条件が整えば親が子供を良い学校に行かせたがるのは当然だ。

Point 2

【Main Idea】Students who go overseas want to acquire a good command of English.

【Supporting Details】Being able to speak foreign language, especially English, is a great advantage in life. Language proficiency is a qualification that can be written on their applications to universities and businesses. More importantly, sharing information, thoughts, and feelings with English speaking people will be possible by mastering English.

【Follow-up & Wrap-up】Although learning a foreign language without going abroad is possible, studying in the country where the language is spoken is the fastest and surest way to do it.

【主張】海外に行く学生は英語が上手になりたいと思っている。

【詳細】外国語、特に英語を話せることは人生において大きな利点だ。言語の熟達は大学や会社への応募書類に書くことのできる資格だ。もっと重要なのは英語を話す人々と情報や考え、感情を共有することが可能になる。

【補足とまとめ】留学せずに言語を習得することは可能だが現地で学ぶのが最も速く確実な方法だ。

Point 3

【Main Idea】Students who study abroad want to widen their views..

【Supporting Details】It is said that one should have a variety of experience to broaden one’s perspective while young. There are many good experiences that one can have for the purpose in one’s home countries such as working or volunteering, but living in a foreign country offers experiences that differ in quality. It smoothly introduces students into life among foreign people and make them familiar with their customs and ideas.

【Wrap-up】They know this experience will be an asset as well as a good memory in their lives. 

【主張】海外に行く学生は英語が上手になりたいと思っている。

【詳細】留学する学生は視野を広げたがっている。若いうちにいろいろな経験をして視野を広げるべきだと言われている。労働やボランティアの様に母国でその目的のためにできる良い経験は多くあるが海外に住むと質の異なる経験をする。外国の人々の中での生活をスムーズに導入し風習や考えに親しませる。

【まとめ】この経験が自分の人生でよい思い出になるのと同様に財産になるということが彼らには分かっているのだ。