2019年7月29日月曜日

TOEFL iBT Independent Writing, Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. - revised -

Writing Topic 
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.


Let’s think
1.      Do you agree with the following statement? Only Italian food is worth spending a lot of money on. Why do you disagree with it? How can you prove that it is wrong?

2.      Finding a counter example
One of the key words of this statement is “only”. Not many things can be described with “only” or “all,” so proving this statement is wrong might be a good start. How can you prove this statement is wrong?
--- To prove that a statement that only A is B is wrong, you show that non-A is also B. In other words, you come up with some counter examples to disprove the statement. Therefore, to disagree with the statement that only people who earn a lot of money are successful, you show that those who do not earn a lot of money are also successful.

3.      Thinking about the definition of “successful”
Another key word of this statement is “successful”. What is the definition of being successful?
--- Reaching a goal helps one feel successful personally, but, to others, it might not be successful. A murderer who has killed the person he believed should not be in this world cannot be called a successful person other than to those who have the same belief as this person. It seems that, to be successful, a person must meet some unsaid criteria set by the society. They might be those who have money, a higher status, or a good life. They might also be admired by many people or have accomplished something important.

4.      Thinking about “making a lot of money”
Is money an essential factor to be regarded as a successful person? Is your uncle who is a dedicated high school teacher everyone in his community respects not successful? What about a researcher who does not make a lot of money but is proud of the job because what the person is doing is part of a large current of a scientific pursuit in which the person shares interest and passion with numerous associates around the world, including those in the past and in the future?

Sample Essay Structure
IntroductionI do not think earning a lot of money is necessary to be successful because there are people who are looked upon as successful even though they do not make a lot of money.
Point 1A person can be regarded as successful if the person earns respect from the world by doing what he believes right.   e.g. Vincent van Gogh
Point 2A person can be regarded as successful if the person is leading a happy, decent life which most people would wish to be theirs.   e.g. a happy, good scientist
Point 3 / Counterargument-treatmentDeep in our heart, we know that becoming rich is not very important in life.   e.g. People consider how a certain rich person became rich in deciding whether he or she is successful or not.
ConclusionEarning a lot of money is only one way of being successful, and there are many people who are regarded as successful in other aspects of life.
Other Sample Conclusions
From the examples above, it is clear that there are many counter examples against the statement that only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Therefore, I cannot agree with the idea.
A large income is not the necessary condition for being successful. Thus, it cannot be said that only those who make a lot of money are successful.
When we think of history, there are few people we remember simply because they were rich. Overall, we remember people who did something with their livesthat were influential in politics, or contributed to science or art or religion. If history is the ultimate judge of success, then money surely isn’t everything. (Barron’s, Writing for the TOEFL iBT, p.322)

Your Sample Essay Structure
Introduction
Point 1
Point 2
Point 3 / Counterargument-treatment
Conclusion


Speech time
Make a one-minute speech on this topic.


Sample Paragraph Development
A      Main IdeaA person can be regarded as successful if the person earns respect from the world.
Supporting Detail (general)Many artists and musicians that young people aspire to be like were not rich.  
Supporting Detail (specific)For example, Vincent van Gogh is one of the most famous and successful artists. His paintings are sold at high prices. It might be difficult to find a museum of modern art without a van Gogh. Department stores have retrospectives of van Gogh as often as those of Impressionists and there is no fine art textbook without his paintings.
Follow upHowever, he never became rich while he was alive. What makes him successful is that he knew his artistic experiment was on the right track and made the world recognize it
Conclusion Although he did not make a lot money, van Gogh was successful as an artist.

B      Main IdeaA person leading a happy, decent life can be called a successful person.
Supporting Detail (general)A happily married full-time housewife can be successful.
Supporting Detail (specific)Even though she does not get paid, she professionally takes care of household work. She enjoys raising children and takes pride in passing down traditions and customs to them.
Follow upSociety often makes little of such people, saying that they do not produce anything substantial. However, they know that their jobs are as productive as any company.
Conclusion If a person is leading a mentally fulfilling life, the person can be called a successful person.


Your Sample Paragraph Development:
Main Idea                                                                                       
                                                                                                     
Supporting Detail (general)                                                                      
                                                                                                    
Supporting Detail (specific)                                                                        
                                                                                                    
                                                                                                    
                                                                                                   
Follow-up                                                                                      
                                                                                                    
                                                                                                   
Conclusion                                                                                      
                                                                                                    

Comments or Suggestion from your partner or group members
                                                                                                    
                                                                                                     
                                                                                                    

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