2017年4月7日金曜日

TOEFL iBT, Integrated Writing, The power of superstition - rewrite -

Question:
Summarize the points in the lecture you just heard explaining how they serve as examples of the points made in the text.



Sample Response:
The lecture relates to the points in the passage, power of superstition and the psychological mechanism of our belief in superstition, by examining a common superstition.

The lecture takes up the behavior of blessing someone who has sneezed and shows how deep-rooted in our minds this particular superstition is. The professor describes how difficult it is not to bless the sneezer by providing his own experience, in which he felt as if he was being accused of not doing it and gave in in the end. This demonstrates the point in the text, the strong influence of superstitions, which makes even highly educated people observe them.

The professor also gives some explanations of this practice, which corresponds to the explanation of the psychological mechanism of our belief in superstition in the passage: superstitions help people overcome fears by providing them with security against what they cannot control. One explanation he provides is the old belief that one’s soul could escape from the body with the sneeze. Another more likely explanation is that sneezing used to be the sign of a fatal disease and that the sneezer actually needed blessing. Although the professor finds an incoherence of this explanation in that there is not the same kind of superstition about coughing, he dismisses it as he finds it natural that explanations for superstitions do not add up because superstitions themselves are beyond logic.
(253 words)


この解答例の構成:
1段落:  Lectureがよくある例を使ってtext の要旨を実証していることの概略
2段落:  Lectureのひとつめの要点とそれがTextのどの要点の例になっているかの説明
(例になっている要点: 不合理と分かっていても信じないではいられなくさせる迷信の力)
3段落:  Lectureのふたつめの要点とそれがTextのどの要点の例になっているかの説明

(例になっている要点: 不安を克服させる迷信の機能)

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