TOEFL iBT Academic Discussion and Writing 9-2 Is it more beneficial for schools to have strict rules, or should a more relaxed approach be taken?

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Question

In your opinion, is it more beneficial for schools to have strict rules, or should a more relaxed approach be taken?

 

 

☆Let’s Think

Do research on the following questions and discuss them with others.

1.        What is Amanda’s point? Provide a case in point.

2.        What is Pete’s point? Provide a case in point.

3.        What is your answer to this question? Share your opinion.

 

 

☆Hints for Points

1.        Rules protect children from troubles.

2.        Children must learn to follow rules to be a law-abiding citizen.

3.        Lack of discipline will make individuals dull like today’s rich retarded politicians who are destroying our country.

4.        It is wrong not to allow autonomy above certain level in anything.

5.        Creativity will be lost because children are not allowed free-thinking.

6.        Children cannot become independent because they do not learn to think by themselves.

 

 

☆Responses for Ideas and Expressions

It is violation of human rights when children are deprived of freedom above certain level. Of course, some rules are necessary for the good of the individual or society. For example, smoking is prohibited in hospitals to protect patients. Wearing seatbelt is mandatory to protect life. However, rules of underwear colors or the number of times a student can use a bathroom are useless, if not harmful. Prohibiting students from wearing a heavy coat during winter or drinking water in the classroom is life-threatening. Forcing students with wavy hair or brown hair by birth to change their hair into dark straight hair is abusive. These rules all violate students’ right to pursue a healthy and cultural life and happiness. Therefore, school rules should not be strict. (126 words)

 

Although some rules are vital for order and safety, I believe a more relaxed approach to school rules should be taken. School in itself is a device to restrict children’s freedom. It forces children to attend 5 to 6 days a week for 4 to 6 hours a day during fixed hours. Some subjects are required subjects. This is already stressful to children even if these rules are intended to help them. Moreover, some schools have uniforms or strict dress codes. Many schools have many more meaningless rules that restrict students’ life to the last detail. The purpose of these rules is to control. By exacting obedience, school successfully makes children braindead. It is for this reason that any fascist entity has countless numbers of rules. Therefore, for healthy environment for education to raise freer, creative minds, school must have as few rules as possible.

(145 words)

 

 

 

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