2019年6月26日水曜日

TOEFL iBT Independent Writing Who would you commemorate with a statue? - revised -

Writing Topic
Your city has decided to build a statue or monument to honor a famous person in your country. Who would you choose?  Use reasons and specific examples to support your choice.


Let’s Think
1.      What kind of person is commemorated with a statue?
--- The person is special and/or famous. Washington was the first President of the United States. Lincoln helped end the slavery. Martin Luther King Jr. peacefully fought against discrimination and sacrificed his life for the purpose. We think these people were so important that we want their statues, the most effective way to remember them. Also, even if not famous, if a person has done something extraordinary, he or she should be worth remembering.

2.      Who were/are such people in your country? Who were/are famous and special? How did they contribute to your society?

Notes:
1)    Since the topic gives no definition about how famous the person should be, as long as a number of people know the person, and even if the person is not world-famous, you can say the person you chose is famous.
2)    If you do not remember the name of the person, you could put it this way: I would choose the person who invented blue, green, and white LED (Light-Emitting Diode).


Ideas and Expressions
Famous but unsung heroes
-       Yamamoto Isoroku, a military man who was opposed to Japan joining WWII.
-       Sasaki Sadako, an atomic bomb victim
-       The person who thought of using fire engines to stop Fukushima nuclear crisis.
-       Miwa Sado, a journalist who is one of the victims of karoshi, overwork death
-       Muraki Atsuko, a former administrative vice minister of the Welfare Ministry who faced a false accusation, won the law suit, and now working for young women suffering at the bottom of the Japanese society motivated by her experience in jail.
-       A mother who accused the government of not providing enough daycare centers on Twitter.
-       The person who invented karaoke

Businessmen
Son Masayoshi: A businessman and the founder and chief executive officer of SoftBank, one of the largest communications in Japan. He is also a philanthropist. He donated 10 billion yen to the victims of the East Japan Great Earthquake and has promised to donate to them all of his income every year. In addition, he has taken initiatives of Japan’s shift to a society based on safe and sustainable energy sources.

Ando Momofuku: He is the inventor of instant noodles and cup noodles. He invented instant noodles to help people struggling to get food in the aftermath of WWII. He kept donating cup noodles and money to the people in poor countries and disaster-stricken areas. (Wikipedia)

Other names: Shibusawa Eiichi, Matsushita Konosuke, Toyota Kiichiro, Honda Sōichirō
                                                                  
Historical Figures
Fukuzawa Yukichi : An author, writer, teacher, translator, entrepreneur and political theorist who founded Keio University. His ideas about government and social institutions made a lasting impression on a rapidly changing Japan during the Meiji Era. He is regarded as one of the founders of modern Japan. (Wikipedia)

Sakamoto Ryōma: A leader of the movement to overthrow the Tokugawa Shogunate during the Bakumatsu period in Japan. (Wikipedia)

Other names: Sugita Genpaku, Yoshida Shoin, Katsu Kaishu, Tsuda Umeko

Cultural Figures
Miyazaki Hayao: A Japanese manga artist and prominent film director. He has made many popular anime films. He often takes up themes like humanity's relationship to nature and technology and the importance of peace. Miyazaki criticizes capitalism and globalization. (Wikipedia)

Dr. Shinya Yamanaka: He is a Japanese medical researcher at Kyoto University who discovered iPS cells and won the Nobel Prize in medicine. His discovery opened a new way of treatment which enabled us to get stem cells without ethical problems and with fewer side effects. Thanks to his work, human-to-human organ transplrtation might be unnecessary in the future.

Other names: Miyazawa Kenji, Tezuka Osamu, Matsuo Basho, Ikkyu, Dazai Osamu, Habu Yoshiharu

Athletes
Nomo Hideo: He is the first Japanese baseball player who successfully challenged the American Major League. He became famous for his unique “tornado” pitching style, which led to a headline, “No more Nomo” and left many records. Nomo opened a way for young Japanese baseball players to play in the United States. After retiring, he has helped promoting baseball among the young.

Uemura Naomi: A Japanese adventurer. He was particularly well known for doing alone what had previously been achieved only with large teams. For example, he was the first person ever to reach the North Pole solo, the first ever to raft the Amazon solo, and the first ever to climb Mount McKinley solo.
(Wikipedia)

Other names: Naomi Osaka, Shimizu Hiroyasu, Arakawa Shizuka, Miura Kazu, Suzuki Ichiro



Sample Short Essay
IntroductionI would like to choose Ryunosuke Akutagawa, a Japanese author, for the commemoration if my city has decided to build a statue of a famous person of my country.
Point 1A well-bred genius who grew up among plain people in Tokyo at the end of the Meiji era that still maintained the traditional communities and cultures of the Edo era, Ryunosuke was a sensitive but worldly man who was very kind and pure-minded. He committed suicide and died young saying that it was the first and last selfish act that he asked for pardon about.  e.g. family, marriage, and the Japanese literary society.
Point 2Rynosuke left many good short stories, which are so popular that many people do not realize that they are written by him.    e.g. Kumo-no-ito and Toshishun
Point 3Living about a century ago, Rynosuke depicted the same anxiety of life that individuals living today have and pointed out the hypocrisy of the developed society. e.g. Torokko and Kappa
ConclusionAlthough he did not make a mature author who left a great novel due to his premature death, he helped build the Japanese roman, which conveyed the rich tradition of sensitive and gentle Japanese mentality, by passing down his sense of art to the generations that followed.

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