2020年9月20日日曜日

TOEFL iBT Independent Writing Do you think cigarette smoking should be stopped by making it illegal or should it remain legal? - revised -

Writing Topic

Some people think that smoking cigarettes should become illegal, since it provides little benefit and a great deal of health risk, others feel that individuals should be free to smoke cigarettes if they choose to do so. Do you think cigarette smoking should be stopped by making it illegal or should it remain legal?

 

 

Let’s Think

1.       If cigarette smoking becomes illegal, which of the following is banned?

a.     Cigarette smoking in public places

b.     Cigarette smoking at home

2.       Discuss the first idea in the writing topic. Does smoking provide little benefit? What kind of health risks does smoking provide?

3.       Discuss the second idea in the writing topic. Can freedom of choice be applied to the choice of smoking?

4.       This topic is the choice between health and freedom. Should cigarette smoking be illegal to protect one’s health or legal to respect one’s freedom and personal responsibility?

 

Hints for points

Cigarette smoking should be illegal.

1. It is toxic and causes cancer and other serious diseases.

2. It is addictive.

3. Second-hand smoke/smoking is a serious threat to public health.

- Counterarguments: 1) There are measures to take to prevent second-hand smoke such as separate-smoking and ban on smoking in public areas. (Smoking will remain legal while smoking in certain areas will be illegal.) These measures are not practical because there are many smokers who do not comply with the rules and you cannot catch or shut up smoke completely. 2) Banning smoking will undermine the economy. Some estimate shows that the smoking related loss, mainly medical costs, surpasses the loss caused by tobacco ban. Even though the estimate is not flawless given other factors such as unhealthy lifestyle and environmental pollution, it is intuitively convincing, since fixing something costs more than preventing the destruction of it in general. 3) Smoking helps smokers release stress.  The so-called relaxing effect of smoking is a myth. It is scientifically proved that smoking has no such effect and actually increases stress by raising blood pressure.

- Conclusion: To protect public health, individual freedom can be limited.

 

Cigarette smoking should not be illegal.

1. You have the right to do whatever you want to do even if it endangers your health.

2. Other dangerous things such as alcoholic drinks or mountain climbing are not illegal.

3. Smoking is a necessary evil like drinking and gambling because it is an established part of society. If cigarettes are banned, some cultures will be affected. For example, coffee shops or music clubs will be affected. Also, cigarette industry would go underground if banned. It will be a source of income for gangs.

- Counterarguments: Secondhand smoke harms other people. Only public smoking should be banned.  - Conclusion: As long as measures are taken to prevent second-hand smoking, the choice between health and fun should be left to each individual.

 

 

Sample essay structures

Sample essay structure 1

Main IdeaCigarettes should be made illegal to protect younger generations and to solve the problem of passive smoking.

Reason 1 Smoking harms one’s health badly.

Reason 2 The number of those who start smoking can be greatly reduced.

Counter-counterargumentIt is true that individuals have the right to choose to do what they want to do but smoking harms other individuals and should be restricted to protect the public good.

ConclusionI am convinced that cigarette smoking should be banned because it will improve public health, especially that of the young generation.

 

 

Sample essay structure 2

Main IdeaIt is more dangerous to ban smoking than to make public totally smoke-free.

Reason 1 Smoking ban would harm democracy.

Reason 2 Making smoking illegal would just stir the society.

Counter-counterargumentIt is true that smoking provides little benefit and many health risks. However, the government should not force people a lifestyle, even though it can recommend it. Also, there are measures to protect other individuals from secondhand smoke.

ConclusionEven though objectively it does no good, smoking should stay legal.

 

Your Sample Essay Structure

Main Idea = Outline I agree/disagree with --- because …

Reason 1

Reason 2

Counterargument-treatmentIt is true that smoking provides little benefit and a great deal of health risk / I partly agree with the feeling that that individuals should be free to smoke cigarettes if they choose to do so. However, …

 

 

Conclusion = Wrap-up

 

 

Essay for Ideas and Expressions

The family of a heavy smoker lose him twice. Long before he dies of a disease related to this unhealthy habit, when they realize that they cannot persuade him to quit smoking, they start a silent but desperate mourning of his premature death. It is grinding to watch your beloved harm himself every day. Still, this is actually a minor aspect of the tragedy of tobacco. Even though it might be difficult to ban smoking because of smokers’ feelings and economic circumstances, cigarettes should be made illegal to solve the problem of second-hand smoke and to protect younger generations.

Smoking seems to be a necessary evil and a matter of self-responsibility just like drinking and gambling, but the problem of second-hand smoke separates it from other indulgences. Cigarette smoke directly harms those who are around the smoker. Children of smokers are more susceptible to respiratory diseases than those of non-smokers. Many people are sensitive to cigarette smoke and feel ill when they inhale it. Although separate-smoking and public smoking ban are promoted, many smokers do not obey the rules and it is impossible to block the contaminated air completely. Also, it is difficult to provide the evidence of unwanted exposure to smoke once the smoker puts it off and walks away. When toxic fumes are in public places every day, it is natural for the government to regulate them.

   Banning smoking is difficult but possible. It seems that cigarettes stay legal because their social influence is not as big as that of drugs and they support the economy. Cigarettes do not make the user dangerous in the way drugs do and smokers can keep functioning in society for decades. Also, the cigarette industry is an established part of economy and produce tax income, so that it is very difficult to discourage the practice. However, changes necessary for public health have occurred in the past. Cigarettes were a replacement, advocated by the government, for chewing tobacco, which was found to be contributing to the transmission of tuberculosis through saliva spat on the ground by the users. The government can make smoking illegal if there is a will to protect public health.

   By making smoking illegal, the number of those who start smoking can be greatly reduced. Smokers find it difficult, and many of them believe it unnecessary, to quit smoking even though it has been scientifically proved that smoking causes lung cancer and other diseases. This is because smoking is addictive. When some toxic substance is addictive, making it illegal is one of the effective ways to reduce its harm. This is especially effective in preventing those who are not addicted, mostly the young, from initiating the habit, since people usually stay away from things that are illegal.

Smoking seriously harms non-smokers as well as smokers, and this ends the discussion on freedom of choice. To protect the health of citizens, especially younger generations, society is ultimately to be totally cigarette smoke-free although care should be taken for smokers and those involved in the industry.

 


2020年9月15日火曜日

Pre-Grammar & Writing 暗記例文 12

 

以下の和文の下線部を関係詞節にして英訳してください。

覚え方のこつ: 1)先に下線部から覚える 2)言って覚えて書いて確認!

 

 

1         私たちはその都市を楽しんだ。その町は多くの呼び物があった

                                                  

                                                                

 

2         彼らはメキシコ市を楽しんだ。そこで彼らは休暇をとったのだ。

                                                  

                                                  

 

3         石油は、黒い金と呼ぶ人もいるが、現在世界で最も価値のある資源のひとつだ。

                                                  

                                                  

                                                  

 

4         私のクラスには20名の生徒がいる。彼らのほとんどは極東出身

                                                  

                                                  

 

 

 

 

 

Pre-Grammar & Writing  暗記例文 11

以下の和文の下線部を関係詞節にして英訳してください。

覚え方のこつ: 1)先に下線部から覚える 2)言って覚えて書いて確認!

 

 

1         彼は、その新らしい赤ちゃん彼の祖父にちなんで名づけられるべきだと主張した

 

                                                  

 

2         適切な身元確認なしでこの部屋に入ることは誰も許可されないことが重要だ

 

                                                  

 

3         政府は、新しい幹線道路が建てられるべきだと提案した

 

                                                  

 

4         私達は、その逮捕された男性は無実だと主張した

 

                                                  

 


2020年9月13日日曜日

TOEFL iBT Independent Writing supplement

Translate the Japanese into English, using the following sentence patterns A or B.

You can use words and expressions in parentheses if you like.

 

A.     What is …. 「~なものは…だ。」

1.       誰かを成功させるものはチャンスではなく勤勉だ。(chance, diligence)

 

                                                                                        

 

                                                                                        

 

2.       一生に一度の機会の結果を左右するものはあなたのしてきた努力です。

(once-in-a-lifetime opportunity, make or break)

 

                                                                                        

 

                                                                                        

 

 

3.       そのフィギュアスケーターをチャンピオンにしたものはその難しいジャンプに挑戦しようという彼女の決定だった。(figure skater, challenge)

 

                                                                                        

 

                                                                                        

 

 

 

B.     It is true that , but I believe that …. 「確かに~だが、私は…だと信じる。」

確かに科学の発見は継続的努力を要するが、型破りなことを試す人々が何か完全に新しいものを発見すると信じる。なぜなら将来の人間に必要なものは触れないで放置されたものの中にあるからだ。(scientific discovery, take constant efforts, the unconventional, something left untouched)

 

                                                                                        

 

                                                                                        

 

1.       確かにチャンスに賭けることは大きな成功につながるかもしれないが成功率は非常に低いと思う。(bet on a chance, lead to, the success rate)

 

                                                                                        

 

                                                                                        

2020年9月6日日曜日

TOEFL iBT Independent Writing What aspect of your hometown would you like to change, and in what way?

Suppose that you had the power to change one thing about your hometown. What aspect of your hometown would you like to change, and in what way? Support your ideas with specific details and reasons.

 

Let’s Think

1.       What does the following proverb mean? Do you feel the same way?

“Every bird thinks its own nest charming.”

2.       Here are some hints to think of what to change about your hometown.

1)     Suppose you were an outsider. What part of your town is embarrassing?

2)     Remember other towns and cities you know and compare them with yours. Is your hometown as beautiful as they are, as convenient as they are, or as exciting as they are?

3)     Think of your ideal town and find what your hometown lacks to be it.

 

Here are some things that can be the hint for the change you could write about:

1.     facilities: hospital, community center, library, swimming pool

2.     system: events, neighborhood watch group, disaster planning

3.     environment: green, pollution, littering, relationships, manners

 

Now make a presentation of your idea about what to change about your town in front of your partner or group members. Ask each other questions or make suggestions about the presentation.

Use the following procedure if you like.

1.     Problem: What is wrong?

e. g. Senior citizens do not have places to get together. Some of them gather at local coffee shops but it is rather expensive to do it every day.

 

 

 

 

2.     Goal: How would you change it?

e. g. I would make all coffee shops in town free to the elderly and also have them have nurses and counselors on call. The expenses would be subsidized by the municipal office, in other words, tax money.

 

 

 

 

 

3.     Expected Benefits: How will it benefit my hometown?

e. g. All seniors in town will have chances to enjoy themselves, their safety and health can be monitored easily, and the fact that my town has places for the elderly is something to be proud of in itself.

 

 

 

 

 

Essay for Ideas and Expressions    Barron’s Writing for the TOEFL iBT, pp. 247-248


 

 

To increase the volume of your essay, find the shortest paragraph and …

1) describe/develop the main idea well: If a paragraph has only one or two sentences, chances are that you have not described/developed well enough. Make sure that each paragraph has its main idea, supporting details (examples), conclusion, and additional supporting details like counter-argument treatment if necessary.

2) describe/develop each sentence well: A statement usually has some exception or needs some condition or concession. Look for a sentence that you can add a reason, condition, concession, or any other additional information, and add “except …”, “as long as …”, “although …”, etc.

3) describe words well: Which of the following sentences gives a clear picture of someone’s pet? 

A) I have a pet.   B) I have a cute cat.   C) I have a little fluffy kitten. With two adjectives and a specific noun, Sentence C) depicts an adorable pet well and it happens to be the longest of the three. Also, use transitions such as First, Also, Moreover, Finally, or Therefore, when necessary.

4) discuss other choices: Even if the Writing Topic does not say, “Discuss the two views” or “Compare and contrast the choices,” you can write about other choices. Doing so will make your essay more convincing and longer. Make sure that you do not digress.

5) take up counter-arguments if necessary: While you are writing, sometimes a counter-argument, “Well, but what about this case?” comes up to your mind. Then it is better not to ignore it but take it up and give a counter-counter-argument or two. By doing so, you can confirm your argument. If you can do it well, you will get a high score.

 

The key to remember is to try to put what you want to say into words as accurately as you can. Then you cannot help adding some more words and sentences, and some more... In the end, your essay will have many words.

2020年9月1日火曜日

早稲田国際教養学部AO入試 Talk to Me

 

動物の知能の高さが人間を基準に判断できるのかどうかは分かりません(例えば夜行性の動物から見れば暗闇で自由に動けない人間は脳の発達が非常に劣っていることになります。「カラスの補習授業」松原始著p.148参照)が、他の動物と言葉でコミュニケーションが取れたらという夢を追うような研究の話です。

 

解答のポイント

本文に書かれた内容から倫理的判断をすると同時に、21世紀の大きな挑戦である環境・気候変動問題と結びつけて解答することもできると思います。

 

主題

イルカは霊長類と同等の認知能力があり、その理由は発達した脳や複雑な社会構造にあると考えられる。監禁して研究するのはかわいそうだと考える研究者もいるが、現在飼育されたイルカを使った双方向コミュニケーションの試みも進んでいる。

 

本文該当箇所  2段落 Herman’s dolphins learned the meaning of more than 30 signals, including nouns and verbs. They also mastered grammar rules.  ハーマンのイルカは名詞や動詞を含む30以上の信号の意味を学習した。彼らはまた文法の法則も習得した。 3段落 The Kewalo dolphins were also able to grasp abstractions. ケワロイルカは抽象化も把握できた。4段落 By the way the animals acted, they, too, demonstrated that they were seeing themselves. その動物たち(イルカたち)の行動の仕方により、彼らもまたイルカに自分が分かるということを実証した。6段落 Marino concluded that it wasn’t ethical to keep and study such an intelligent creature in captivity and switched to using imaging technology to analyze the size and structure of brains from dolphins that has died of natural causes. マリオはそんなにも知的な生き物を捕らわれの身の状態に保ち研究することは非倫理的だと結論し、自然死したイルカの脳の大きさと構造を分析するために画像技術の使用に変わった。Mario’s calculations showed that bottlenose dolphins have an EQ of 4.2, and dolphins on average higher EQ than primates. マリノの計算はバンドウイルカが4.2の大脳化率であり、イルカは平均で霊長類より大脳化率が高いことを示した。  8段落 Suddenly, Bijyo, a juvenile female, glides in and gulps down the eel, bringing the lesson to an abrupt end. Deni appears outraged, as if Bijyo has committed a serious offense. 突然年少のメスビジョーが滑り込みそのウナギを飲み込み、その授業を突然終了させる。デニはまるでビジョーが重大な無礼を犯したかのように怒って見える。 9段落 such structured social patterns may help explain the dolphin brain. そのような構造化された社会の型はイルカの脳の説明を助けるかもしれない。Individuals who live in complex social groups require complex cognition. 複雑な社会的集団内で生活する個体は複雑な認知を必要とする。To thrive, you have to understand what the social rules arewhen you have to obey them and when you can get away with not obeying themand who the players are. 繁栄するためには、社会の決まりが何か、決まりに従わなくてはならない時と決まりに従わないで逃げ切ることができる時、そして誰が重要人物なのかを理解しなくてはならない。10段落 Why Denise’s work is exciting is that none of the dolphin studies have been truly two-way. デニスの研究がワクワクさせる理由はイルカの研究で真に双方向のものはひとつもないからです。The humans could request or the dolphins could request, but Denise is working to achieve a back-and forth. And if the dolphins introduce their own whistles, that would be amazing. 人間が要求するかイルカが要求することはできます。しかしデニスはやりとりの達成に取り組んでいるのです。そしてもしイルカたちが自分たち自身の笛を導入すれば驚くべきことです。

 

各段落の要旨

第1段落 人間の言葉や数を覚える霊長類や鳥類がいる。

2段落 イルカは語彙だけでなく文法も学習する。

3段落 抽象概念も理解するイルカがいる。

4段落 イルカには自己認知能力がありミラーテストに反応する。

5段落 霊長類以外で自己認知能力があることが分かったのはイルカが初めてだった。

6段落 イルカは大脳化率が霊長類より大きい。

7段落 野生のイルカを研究するとイルカの文化が分かる。

8段落 イルカ社会には序列が存在する。

9段落 イルカの複雑な社会構造が脳の発達を促している可能性がある。

10段落 人とコミュニケーションが取れる可能性もある。

11段落 人とイルカの双方向コミュニケーションの試みがあり、イルカが言葉を作れば素晴らしい。

 

(1)問1~5 記号問題

考え方 上記各段落の要旨及び別紙参照

 

(2)エッセイ

イルカの知能に関して新たに分かったことによりイルカの取り扱いに関する国際法が確立されるべきでしょうか?解答用紙に提供された場所に英語で自分の意見とそれを支持する理由を述べてください。

 

考え方 

1. 本文の情報(第6段落で出てくる高い知能を持つイルカを監禁して研究することに良心の呵責を感じる研究者の話)をもとに考える。

2. 動物の意識や権利に関する知識をもとに答える。            

Ideas and Expressions 

Agree:

As written in this passage, some researchers who have learned that dolphins are as aware as a two-year old human is have stopped their research on dolphins in captivity. This means that if given the same understanding, people around the world will do the same. However, the consensus has not been made while some dolphins suffer. Therefore, there should be a regulation to protect them. Personally, I think what humans have been doing since the Industrial Revolution is a serious violation of animal rights. We have invaded their habitat and contaminated air, water, and soil. About half the birds in North America have gone extinct over the past 50 years, for example. Other species, including those are useful to humans, are decreasing. Before nature punishes us, we may have to slow down, do soul searching on our way of life, and humbly stop deciding which animal should be protected based on our standard.

 

Disagree:

Protection of animal rights and that of human rights to pursue happiness are sometimes not compatible. We eat cows, pigs, and chickens, all of which have been proven to have higher level of cognition than we think. Even mice are reported to show empathy. Therefore, if we talk about dolphins, we have to talk about all the animals as it is difficult to draw a line between animals to be saved and those that can be forsaken. It is said that even an insect of 3 cm has a spirit of 1.5 cm in Japan. Also, many cultures around the world are dependent on hunt for whales, which is biological cousins of dolphins and are highly intelligent. Banning their practice deprives of their livelihood just as cattle farmers will lose their job if meat consumption is prohibited. Thus, blanket treatment of this issue should be avoided.