2026年7月5日日曜日

TEOFL iBT Writing for an Academic Discussion Is fashion and clothing important? (Revised)

 

Some people argue that investing effort and money in dressing fashionably and attractively is important. Others believe that spending resources on clothes is unnecessary and that money and effort should be better utilized elsewhere. Given these perspectives, do you think fashion and clothing are important, and why?

 

 

 

Lets Think

Which do you spend more of your discretionary money, pocket money, on, dressing fashionably and attractively or other activities like hanging out with your friends or buying books? Why?

 

 

Hints for Points

The first view (fashion)

1.       We communicate partly by how we dress, and to dress yourself fashionably is to show others your good will and to get a good impression about you from others.

 

2.       In capitalism, fancy attire means wealth, which is supposed to earn respect. In this materialistic mindset, people judge you by your appearance, especially how you embellish yourself.

 

3.       Enjoying fashion is enjoying life. You have to value and take care of yourself, and naturally you will be conscious of fashion.

 

4.       Fashion is related to identity. It shows your lifestyle. Certain clothing gives you a sense of belonging to a group of people who enjoy the same type of fashion.

 

The second view (other things)

1.       As the saying goes, you cannot judge a book by its cover. What counts more is not outfit but personality. A good appearance will follow self-improvement. 

 

2.       Fashion seems to be just another factor to make life colorful like art and music that is not necessarily the priority in individual lives.

 

3.       Fashion is not eternal. Its trend changes every year. You should be focused more on something that lasts forever such as arts, science, or political actions.

 

4.       Fashion is part of the industry or the economic activity. Advertisements make many of us buy more than what we need. Spending much money on fashion is a result of brainwashing of consumerism.

 

 

Sample Response

ThesisAlthough I enjoy looking at fashionable people and I know the sentiment Emma points out, the high spirit gained through dressing yourself in style, I agree with Tim in terms of the importance of expanding your horizon.

Supporting DetailsAs far as I know, knowledge of fashion is inversely proportional to how interesting the person is. Most people who are dressed as if they came out of a fashion magazine and utter various brand names talk about little else. On the other hand, people who never make others bored with their talks that are full of knowledge and experiences are not the best dressers on the list of the people I found cool. They have spent their precious time and money on their development.

Counterargument-treatmentOf course, fashion is part of culture, even regarded as an art, and so there is nothing wrong in indulging yourself in fashion once in a while. However, taking fashion seriously would be an issue like an eating disorder, an obsession with food. Interesting people who are also dressed decently have never spent all their resources on improving their appearances. Fashion is just another part of their life and education. It could also be a result of learning about other more significant things like history, literature, music, and fine art. They have never prioritized fashion in their lives. To do so is to put the cart before the horse.

ConclusionThus, I believe that focusing on improving your inner self is more important than to do so in fashion, especially than to pathologically pursue fashion trends. (257 words)

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