TOEFL iBT Writing A form of transportation that will be more common in the future (Revised)

What form of transportation do you believe will be more common in the future?

 

 

 

☆Let’s Think

1.        What environmental and social challenges will happen in the future?

2.        What form of transportation are getting popular lately? What are the advantages of using them?

 

 

☆Hints for Points

Environmental and social challenges

・Climate crisis caused by global warming.

・Air, water, and soil pollution will be exacerbated.

・World population will increase.

・Due to climate change and some other factors like economic issues, populations in cities will increase.

 

Means of transportation that are getting popular lately and their good points

・Autonomous vehicles are increasing as societies age and shrink.

・Cars allow privacy and freedom.

・Trains and buses are less harmful to the environment than cars because they can carry many more people than cars.

・EVs don’t use fossil fuels directly although the electricity is mainly from thermal power planets.

・Planes allow us to travel overseas.

・Bicycles will prevail as awareness of the possible power failure caused by disasters rise.

 

 

☆Sample Responses

Sample 1 

【Thesis】I share my view with Ryan especially in terms of how society will cope with environmental challenges caused by climate crisis and pollution.  

【Supporting Details】Trains are much more efficient than cars. Trains allow efficient transportation than cars. Also, even though they run on electricity, which is produced mainly by power plants that emit greenhouse gases, they don’t pollute the air like combustion engine cars do. Electric buses and coaches will be adopted more for the same advantage. They also fit aging society for the obvious reason.

【Counterargument-treatment】I don’t think that the convenience and comfort of cars will be missed when environmental destruction and population growth stress the lives of the future generations even harder than now. They will have no choice but to resort to technologies that are friendliest to the ecosystems.

【Conclusion】Thus, public transportation will be used more in the future. (144 words)

 

Sample 2

【Thesis】I am convinced that cars that run with fossil fuels will still be popular in the future because vested interests of the oil industry will keep dominating society.

【Supporting Details】Social structure won’t change much. The movement of environmental protection started half a century ago. Talks about global warming started about 30 years ago. Little has actually been achieved. Although some goals like raising awareness and making related laws were met, extinction has been exponentially increasing and average temperature has been highest every year over the past several years. Despite extensive government support for decades, EV diffusion rate is around 20%.Even when technologies friendly to the ecosystems, there is little will to use it.

【Counterargument-treatment】EVs run on electricity, which is produced mainly by burning fossil fuels. Alternative energy sources that are said to be environmentally friendly actually use fossil fuels and emit greenhouse gasses in their making and running. The green industry and the movement are one big lie.

【Conclusion】Unless governments take up a new value and plans based on a value totally different now, value of compassion, neither society nor its transportation systems will change. (188 words)

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