2016年2月29日月曜日

TOEFL, iBT, Independent Writing, How to use a large donation of money to your school - rewrite -

Writing Topic
Imagine that the school you attend has received a large donation of money. If you had the power to decide how to spend this money, how would you choose to use the money? Offer specific reasons to explain your response.

Let’s Think
Reading this question, you might say to yourself, “This question is a piece of cake. I could use the money for the drama club I belong to. Building a theater would be a good idea. I have a lot to write about.” However, you might not be really answering the question well enough as you write, for the usage of the money should be something that benefits the whole school either directly or indirectly. Explaining how the drama club can contribute to the whole school might be a necessary part of your essay.

Finding something that contributes to a large number of students would be a choice easier to write about. It can be for the improvement of the thing that already exists or it can be something that does not exist. Here are some things that can be the hint for the needs you could write about:
1.    facilities: library, computer room, laboratory, gymnasium, cafeteria
2.    system: exchange students program, scholarship
3.    environment: buildings, surrounding areas, trees and lawns

Now let’s ask ourselves some questions about the needs and answer them.

1.    Problem: What is wrong?
e.g. Many students cannot afford home stay. Also, even for students who can afford it, it consumes a lot of time and energy.




2.    Goal: What should be done?
e. g. I would set up a fund for a domestic home stay program. Through the program, students stay at homes of native speakers of English who are staying in Japan.




3.    Expected Benefits: How will it benefit my school?
e.g. The financial burden would be lighter, and in case something goes wrong, adjustment can be done more quickly and easily than the case of real home stay.



Sample Essay

Writing for the TOEFL iBT, p. 331, Barron’s

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