2024年5月20日月曜日

Writing for an Academic Discussion How to use a substantial plot of land for development to meed the needs of society  - revised -

Question: What do you think is the best way to develop a substantial plot of land which the government of your community has the freedom to develop in any manner it sees fit, considering the current needs of society and how different types of development could impact the society?

 

 

Discussion

1.     Which of the following three responses to the question above do you think is the least proper? Why?

A)      I would sell it to buy whatever I want.

B)      I would build an amusement park on the land.

C)      I would make it a refugee camp which can help refugees (to) become independent.

 

Note: Response A) is not a way to develop land. Response B) is a way to develop land but an amusement park may not be among the most needed usage of society. C) meets the need of society because so-called refugee crisis is one of the main issues of today’s world. The heart of today’s question is thinking about a way to use a huge area of land, which provides space, soil, ecological system, the atmosphere above it, life and joy, and many other things that we can take advantage of.

 

2.     What are the current needs of society, and how can the land be developed to make a difference to meet the needs of society?

 

 

Hints for Points

a huge air purifier/water tank/vegetable garden/nature park/factory of micropower generators 

a free cafeteria/ food bank/daycare center/evacuation center/space without commercial facilities 

a shelter for refugees/the homeless/stray animals an independent radio station/TV station

a tuition-free college/hospital/school/library/museum/botanical garden/ballpark/theater/concert hall

 

 

Presentation

1.     Make a presentation to your partner or group members on your response to the question above by answering the following questions.

 

1)     What is a current need of society of your concern? What is its present situation?

e.g. It is refugee crisis. They are in desperate situations and need support.

 

2)     How would you use the land to change the situation?

e.g. I would make the land a refugee camp and provide support and helping them (to) become independent so that they can live a healthy and cultural life.

 

3)     What are the advantages of it? 

e.g. It would save many lives.

 

4)     What problem can you expect as a result of your action, and how would you address it?

e.g. Some local residents might not be happy about accepting refugees, but we can learn from the past and deal with it.

 

2.     Ask each other questions about each other’s presentations. This will help (to) make your essays more interesting.

 

 

Sample response

I would use the land to help escape so-called refugee crisis. There are 35.5 million refugees around the world now. They have fled or lost their homes due to overwhelming events such as conflicts, oppressions, and disasters. They are in desperate situations, including threat of their lives. and need support. Therefore, I would make the land a refugee camp and provide support to help them (to) become independent so that they can live a healthy and cultural life. It would save many lives. Also, it would facilitate economic and political actions for early safe returns of refugees to their homes. A possible problem would be that some local residents might not be happy about accepting refugees, but we can learn from the past and deal with it. We accepted refugees in the last refugee crisis in the last century, and we can cope with this problem by learning from what we did then. One countermeasure would be to focus on the positive effects of accepting refugees like enrichment of our culture as a result of encountering new cultures like that of America. (182 words)

 


 

 

For reference: An essay on the same kind of topic

There would be many wise or innovative uses of a large tract of land, but I would make it a town which is a test case for peaceful coexistence of people and jungle crows. No other birds are so stigmatized as crows, particularly in Japan, where I live. They are regarded as filthy garbage-eaters, spiteful punks, and the sign of death. Yet, if observed carefully without prejudice, they will turn out to be as likable as dolphins. In fact, they are sometimes called flying dogs. They could possibly be our best friends in the sky.

   Jungle crows are the big black birds often seen scattering the contents of garbage bags collected on the sidewalks in many Japanese cities. This is the main reason why they are hated, yet if you know their history, you will know that they are not to blame. They used to live in forests and feed on dead animals on the ground. Development replaced trees with buildings, and animal bodies with garbage bags. They have been doing the same to survive, nesting on the power poles and eating waste on the ground, but now humans are offended by their routine. People think crows are dirty and dangerous. However, crows bathe a few times a day. They attack people only when they feel their nestlings are in danger, and the worst thing they could do is to swoop and kick from behind, which they rarely actually do because they are afraid of humans. It is true that they remember the face of the person who attacked or threatened them and repeatedly retaliate, but considering their trauma, it is understandable that they do it for self-defense. The biggest stigma that crows bear is the image of death, which probably derives from their color. Surely, they eat dead bodies, but so do many other creatures, from lions to bacteria. The fear of the color black is our problem, not theirs. In the eyes of humans on the ground, crows on power lines might be eerie dark spots in the sky, but seen from high above, they are precious pieces of life shining in purple and green.

   Although loathed, crows are well known to be smart, affectionate, and remarkable birds. They store their food in thousands of places and remember them. They use their calls for their communication. Moreover, they use tools, and one subspecies has evolved to make a tool. Sometimes, their behavior cannot be explained by any other words but play. There are reports of crows repeatedly sliding down the slide or snow slope or hanging upside down from the power line. Also, jungle crows mimic many kinds of things, such as human words or machine noises. They cherish their mates and babies. There are many reports that crows grieve the death of other crows. I myself know a jungle crow which missed its mate for at least three years. When its mate suddenly disappeared, it made the saddest voice I had ever heard. One of the most striking things about crows is their eyes and ears. As they can see ultraviolet like other birds and as they can fly high, they can spot a very small thing from hundreds of meters high. They hear what humans cannot hear. Above all, they play an important role as scavengers getting rid of things people do not want to see lying on the ground like a dead mouse. Now you might find this bird a little more interesting than before.

   In my opinion, it is a shame that we do not have good relationships with jungle crows, these charming and interesting birds that happen to live closest to us, and here comes my model town for both jungle crows and humans. This town would have several parks full of tall trees, to which the garbage the residents produce would be sent. Since jungle crows are originally from forests and tend to live where food is abundant, it can be easily expected that they would stay in the parks most of the time. Thus, they would stop littering the streets. Moreover, the cost of waste incineration would be reduced, and so would CO2 emissions. Humans can enter the parks and enjoy nature anytime except for the breeding season. My wildest dream is to have crows participate in rescue operations. For their ability to fly a long distance and high cognitive level, not to mention the great eyesight and hearing, they would make good rescue crows. Of course, to protect animal rights, only those that are willing and having the aptitude and characteristics should be given the missions. I actually know a crow that is eligible for it. Like us, crows also have some individuals that seek for challenge and bonding.

   I once saw a jungle crow perched on a power line entertaining a dog down in a garage. The dog, wagging its tail and jumping around in the small space, looked quite happy to see its friend with wings. The scene reflected their positions in this world: one was confined and the other free. Crows could have been domesticated long ago, since their cleverness must have been noticed by our ancestors, but they have not. I feel, with no offense to dogs, that crows know what dignity is and keep a distance from humans. They are hated but live proudly. They are sensitive enough to feel the pain of life, yet they will never give up on life and can do without such things as hope or dream or religion. Perhaps we could learn something important from them by living closer to them than now.

 

Note: Some of the information about crows included in this essay are taken from Karasu no Kyokasho by Hajime Matsubara, a crow researcher.


Write your response in 10 minutes. Show each other your responses. Write down questions or suggestions to each other’s response.

 

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2024年5月18日土曜日

Writing for an Academic Discussion How to use a substantial plot of land for development to meed the needs of society

Question: What do you think is the best way to develop a substantial plot of land which the government of your community has the freedom to develop in any manner it sees fit, considering the current needs of society and how different types of development could impact the society?

 

 

Discussion

1.     Which of the following three responses to this do you think is the least proper? Why?

A)      I would sell it to buy whatever I want.

B)      I would build an amusement park on the land.

C)      I would make it a refugee camp which can help refugees (to) become independent.

Note: Response A) is not a way to develop land. Response B) is a way to develop land but it is not clear if it meets the current needs of society. C) meets the need of society because refugee crises are occurring in many parts of the world now, and building a refugee camp help soften the crises, The heart of the question is thinking about a way to use a huge area of land, which is something that provides space, soil, ecological system, the atmosphere above it, life and joy, and many other things that we can take advantage of.

 

2.     What are the current needs of society, and how can the land be developed to make a difference to meet the needs of society?

 

 

Hints for Points

a huge air purifier/water tank/vegetable garden/nature park  a factory to manufacture facilities of micropower generation  a repair factory of electronics

a free cafeteria/food bank/daycare center/evacuation center  an area without commercial facilities 

a shelter for refugees/the homeless/stray animals an independent radio station/TV station

a hospital/school/library/museum/botanical garden/ballpark/theater/concert hall

 

 

Presentation

1.     Make a presentation to your partner or group members on your response to today’s question by answering the following questions.

 

1)     What is one of the current needs or issues of society? What is its present situation?

e.g. It is refugee crisis. There are 35.5 million refugees in the world now. They are in desperate situations and need support.

 

2)     How would you use the land to change the situation?

e.g. I would make the land a refugee camp so that refugees can live a healthy and cultural life by providing support and helping them (to) become independent.

 

3)     What are the advantages of it? 

e.g. It would save many lives. It would also enrich cultures of my own society.

 

4)     What problem can you expect, and how would you address it?

e.g. Some local residents might not be happy about accepting refugees, but we accepted some refugees in the past during a refugee crisis in Asia, and we can cope with this problem by learning from what we did then. Also, we must make sure that refugees will be able to return home as soon as possible.

 

2.     Ask each other questions about each other’s presentations. This will help (to) make your essays more interesting.

 

 

Sample response

I would use the land to help escape refugee crisis. There are 35.5 million refugees around the world now. They have fled or lost their homes due to overwhelming events such as conflicts, oppressions, and disasters. They are in desperate situations, including threat of their lives. and need support. Therefore, I would make the land a refugee camp and provide support to help them (to) become independent so that they can live a healthy and cultural life. It would save many lives. A possible problem would be that some local residents might not be happy about accepting refugees. However, we accepted some refugees in the last refugee crisis in the last century, and we can cope with this problem by learning from what we did then. Also, we must make sure that refugees will be able to return home as soon as possible.

(142 words)

 

 

 

 


Write your response in 10 minutes. Show each other your responses. Write down questions or suggestions to each other’s response.

 

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2024年5月13日月曜日

Writing for an Academic Discussion A travel agency with a guided tour or to plan your own trip and explore without a guide?  - revised -

Question: Which method do you think is better for experiencing new places, to go on trips organized by a travel agency with a guided tour or to plan your own trip and explore without a guide? Consider benefits and possible downsides of both approaches in your answer.

 

 

Let’s Think

1.        Compare the benefits and possible downsides of the two choices in the question in terms of safety, convenience, flexibility, freedom, costs, and others.

2.        Tell the others about your choice and the reason for it.

 

 

Hints for Points

To go on trips organized by a travel agency with a guided tour

1.     Inexpensive: It costs much less than a solo trip.

2.     Safer: It protects tourists from potential dangers.

3.     Efficient: The travel agency does the arrangements and booking and the guide knows everything necessary for entertainment and learning.

 

To plan your own trip and explore without a guide

1.     Free and flexible: Planning is at the discretion of the traveler and decisions can be impromptu.

2.     More interaction with the locals: Absence of a guide and other fellow travelers makes more intimate interaction with the people in the destination possible.

3.     Free from commercialism: You can contact places and things that are not set aside exclusively for tourists, such as a local market place or a gathering of the residents.

 

 

Essay for Ideas and Expressions

The traveler in one of Dave Mason’s beautiful songs, Mystic Traveler, would not join a guided group tour because the lyrics goes “He is an unraveler”, which connotes to anti-establishment. The song is said to be about Jesus Christ probably because of the title and such phrase as “when he takes your heart, you are not alone”, but it also seems to me to hint that there is some deep experience that we expect in traveling. Whether this traveler is Jesus or Jack in the street, he is not a consumer but the stranger and outsider, and the interaction with him reveals the secret of life and merges the souls of those involved with him in love and eternity, which few in guided group tours would experience. A guided tour may well be a best, but may not be the best.

 

Traveling is an action driven by various reasons. People have traveled for various reasons since ancient times. We may travel to find something new: a new land, a new friend, or a new self. We may travel to see the world, to visit the places of our ancestors, or to challenge ourselves. We might also travel for fun. The word travel seems to me to connote an action driven by a dire need for something essential in our inner life. Depending on the need, we choose the best form of traveling that fits the need. For example, a man who wants to see the world may want to travel alone so that he can directly have a feel of the place he is visiting, and a woman who feels that she is losing herself will visit her hometown without a company to listen to the voices in her memory she recalls at the sites she visits and people she meets there. Friends who want to make their bond stronger may try not to join in group tours, and a group of insect collectors may be disappointed if they are taken to a famous café in downtown Paris instead of the forest nearby, where there are indigenous bugs. Traveling means much more than merely taking a sightseeing tour. When I hear the word traveler, I think of an explorer of reality, seeking meaningful interactions with people or nature outside the person’s daily life. For this matter, traveling alone seems to be the most natural because a group tour with a tour guide is an extension of daily life.

 

A guided group tour is a commercial attraction which is a win-win product between the tour industry and busy workers in the developed world. Tourists who want to enjoy themselves away from home and work, experience something exotic, and make some good memories choose a guided tour for convenience and safety, and they usually go in a group because of the spirit of the saying, “The more, the merrier.” The tourism follows the rule of the economy of scale. Booking for transportation, accommodation, and attractions such as local theaters and restaurants in large numbers lowers the costs. The tour guide entertains the tourists and safely takes them back home. It is probably the most popular style of travel as a leisure activity, although it is not certain that people think it the best way to travel because it usually does not provides more than it promises like other mass products.

 

Perhaps I might be too romantic, believing that people want more than a package tour out of traveling, believing that they want some special experience on their own. However, solo travel is in fact very popular. My home country Japan is not an exception. Excerpts from a classic travelogue written in the medieval Japan, “Oku no Hosomichi,  Back Roads to Far Towns, are in textbooks in junior high schools. About half a century ago, Makoto Oda, a Japanese student from the University of Tokyo, who was then at Harvard, traveled around the world alone with only a return air ticket and 200 dollars. After the journey, he wrote a travelogue, Nandemo Miteyaro, I’ll Go and See Everything, which became the bestseller in Japan. Now, many people around the world travel without a guide. Travel agencies have started providing various kinds of tours to meet various demands of both experienced travelers who are fed up with package tours and people who are from the beginning interested in specific destinations which happen to be out of the tourism network. For many people, a guided group tour is not the best choice.

 

The word travel encompasses a broad range of activities related, either directly or indirectly, to our existence, while a guided group tour is a relatively new activity for fun. The best way to travel efficiently for sport can be in a group led by a tour guide. However, the best way to travel varies depending on what the traveler is in search of, and I believe we all want to be a mystic traveler deep in our heart when we say, “I’ve got to hit the road.”

 

 

Sample Responses

Sample 1

ThesisI think that traveling in a group led by a tour guide is better than traveling individually because a group tour is inexpensive and it ensures safety and satisfaction.

Supporting DetailsIt allows us to visit popular sightseeing spots with group-discount rates that are at least 20% off for a score of tourists. The guide’s recommendation and lecture help the tourists to make the most out of what they paid for the tour. A comparison between a school trip and an individual family trip would clearly show how much more effective and efficient a guided group tour is.

Counterargument-treatmentAn obvious downside is that it allows little freedom, but it helps avoid a disaster. A visit to an unfamiliar place tends to cause problems such as disorientation, loss of belongings, and involvement in crimes. To avoid such disasters, an organized tour is offered by the industry. Also, a group tour offers options not to join guided tours, so it is more flexible and freer than you think it is.

ConclusionConsidering risks and disadvantages associated with traveling alone without a guide, I do not have much problem in saying that the guided group tour is a better way to travel. (196 words)

 

Sample 2

ThesisJoining a group tour with a guide may not be the better than traveling on your own depending on the goal of the trip.

What is Traveling?Traveling is an action driven by various reasons from curiosity to new places and peoples to testing oneself to a way of soul-searching.

Group Tour with GuideA guided group tour is an attraction which is a win-win product between the tour industry and the busy workers in the developed world. Safe and well-organized tours offered with reasonable charges based on economy of scale meets the demand of novice travelers who want to make the best of what they can pay for their leisure time they secure in their tight schedules.

Solo TourHowever, taking a solo trip has been in fact very popular since ancient times. The popularity seems to be related to our primal urge to go beyond our comfort zone and go through experiences that will connects us with the world.

ConclusionThus, fulfillment a solo travel can give you is better in quality than what a guided group tour can.  (171 words)

 

 

Your Sample Response Structure


A

Thesis

Supporting Details

Counterargument-treatment

Conclusion

 

B

Thesis

A Guided Group Tour

A Solo Trip

Conclusion



 

 



Write your response in 10 minutes. Show each other your responses. Write down questions or suggestions to each other’s response.


 

                                                   DRAFT