2024年9月20日金曜日

Writing for Academic Discussion Should cigarettes be banned?

Should cigarettes be banned, or should people be allowed to make their own choices? (public health)

 

 

☆Let’s Think

Notes:

1)     40 years ago, smoking was not a concern in Japan. Many people smoked. They smoked anywhere, anytime, and no one complained. Starbucks was the only shop that was non-smoking till about 20 years ago. In 2003, a law obligating public organizations to prevent passive smoking started, and spaces for non-smokers or those for smokers were made. Since then, the number of smokers has gradually decreased, and smoking in public areas was banned in 2020.

2)     Ban on cigarettes means that production, sales, and purchase of cigarettes are prohibited by law.

 

1.        Is there anyone who smokes around you? Do you want them to stop smoking? Why/Why not?

2.        Marijana is now legal in most states of the U.S., and it is legal throughout Netherland. Why?

3.        Is secondhand smoke avoidable completely?

 

 

☆Hints for Points

Smoking cigarette should be banned:

1.        Smoking is toxic and causes cancer and other serious diseases.

2.        It is addictive.

3.        There is the problem of second-hand smoke/smoking.

4.        Smokers’ families lose them twice. They first lose them when the smoker refuses to stop smoking despite their begging before the smoker actually dies of a disease caused by their smoking.

 

Smoking cigarettes should stay legal:

1.        The government has no right to prohibit individual habits. (infringement of freedom)

2.        Only public smoking should be banned.

3.        Smokers will be stressed out and resort to other harmful substances if smoking is banned.

4.        Banning will make cigarettes go underground just like what happened in the Great Prohibition and what has happened to cannabis.

 

 

☆Ideas and Expressions  

【Thesis】Although I partly agree with Sophia in that second-hand smoking must be prevented for public health by any means necessary, I am skeptical of the legitimacy of banning cigarette smoking.

【Supporting Details】Although the government must protect public health and therefore must ban harmful substances like poisonous drugs, cigarettes are not so harmful as it has little immediate effect on the health of the user. Actually, substances that are as harmful as or could be more harmful than cigarettes such as alcohol and sugar are not banned, either. These products have been around as part of people’s lives for a long time, and they are closely intertwined with sense of happiness. Banning their use will take away the pleasure and other vices related to them from the users. This is a violation of freedom to pursue happiness. Decisions on whether to take health risks in exchange for indulgence should be left to individual decisions. Thus, the government is not authorized to intervene an individual’s habit of smoking.

【Counterargument-treatment】Of course, education on adverse effects, regulation of excessive advertising, and ban on public smoking must be ensured. However, other than the reason I wrote above, total ban on smoking will make it go underground, and lives of those who are heavily addicted to smoking will be affected as they will get illegal products just as users of illegal drug do. Smokers without cigarettes may also start other bad habits like heavy drinking, and this is a retrogression in health promotion.

【Conclusion】Therefore, smoking in private spaces should be at the discretion of individuals.

(258 words)

 


Write your response in 10 minutes. Show each other your responses. Write down questions or suggestions to each other’s response.

 

 

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2024年9月14日土曜日

Writing for Academic Discussion Pushing young people to take risks or emphasize caution? - revised -

Should we be pushing young people to take more risks, or should we emphasize caution instead?

 

 

☆Let’s Think

1.        Name examples of risk-taking.

2.        Would you give it a go with the following cases? Why/why not?

a.     choosing to be a professional athlete, musician, artist, or writer instead of studying for higher education

b.     going abroad for a year after graduation instead of taking a very good job

c.      confessing your love to someone

d.     starting a business

3.        Share your experience that is similar to Lily’s point: Taking a risk leads to personal growth.

4.        Have you ever been persuaded not to take a risk? Share the story with others. What were the concerns?

 

 

☆Hints for Points

Taking risks

1.        Nothing ventured, nothing gained.

2.        It is only when you are young that you can take risks.

3.        By taking risks, young people will grow whether they fail or not.

4.        Precarious life is stressful.

 

Exercising caution

1.        Slow and steady wins the race.

2.        Learning to make an informed decision is important to be successful.

3.        One should prioritize protecting what has been proved secure and beneficial.

4.        Loss of opportunities might happen, for luck and fun are often something new and strange.

5.        “Enter through the narrow gate. For wide is the gate and broad is the road that leads to destruction.” Matthew 7: 13-14

 

 

☆Ideas and Expressions  

【Thesis】I believe that it is irresponsible for adults to encourage young people to take risks because risk-taking is gambling, a trap that is easy and exciting.

【Supporting Details】Very often, what is called risk-taking is a premature action done by skipping the process of rigorous research, meticulous planning, and robust and patient execution of the plan, which are the practices that are imperative for success. Young people must train themselves through these practices to gain enough knowledge and skills for their goals. In addition, successful adventure depends on experience, but, as James points out, young people lack adequate experience to take a risk. They should wait and learn until they are ready to take up the challenge they cannot escape when the time is ripe.

【Counterargument-treatment】Lily’s point that taking a risk can lead to personal growth sounds valid. Taking responsibility of the action and wider perspective and confidence gained through new experiences contributes to well-rounded and resourceful personality, whether the person wins or loses. However, venturing also involves a huge loss when the challenger fails. For example, failing to establish a business will leave the person with a huge debt, sense of loss, regret, and feeling of inferiority. They may also lose their family and friends. Very strong will power and discipline are necessary to overcome the predicament, and most people are not so strong and become real losers, who give up their life itself. Moreover, victory at an early age has a negative impact on the person’s life as it makes the person contented and conceited, even if the success was greatly due to luck, and personal growth will stop there. Even depravation may occur.

【Conclusion】In the end, slow but steady is the best policy. Real chances will come to those who are ready to grab it after their enough efforts. (299words)

 


Write your response in 10 minutes. Show each other your responses. Write down questions or suggestions to each other’s response.

 

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Writing for Academic Discussion Pushing young people to take risks or emphasize caution?

Should we be pushing young people to take more risks, or should we emphasize caution instead?

 

 

☆Let’s Think

1.        Name examples of risk-taking.

2.        Would you give it a go with the following cases? Why/why not?

a.     going abroad for a year after graduation instead of taking a very good job

b.     choosing to be a professional athlete, musician, artist, or writer

c.      confessing your love to someone

d.     starting a business

3.        Share your experience that is similar to Lily’s point: Taking a risk leads to personal growth.

4.        Have you ever been persuaded not to take a risk? Share the story with others. What were the concerns?

 

 

☆Hints for Points

Taking risks

1.        Nothing ventured, nothing gained.

2.        It is only when you are young that you can take risks.

3.        By taking risks, young people will grow whether they fail or not. Challenging makes them confident, resilient, resourceful, and creative.

4.        Precarious life is stressful.

 

Exercising caution

1.        You can avoid mistakes and embarrassment.

2.        Learning to make an informed decision is important to be successful.

3.        One should prioritize protecting what has been proved secure and beneficial.

4.        Loss of opportunities might happen, for luck and fun are often something new and strange.

 

 

☆Ideas and Expressions  

【Thesis】I believe that it is irresponsible for adults to encourage young people to take risks.

【Supporting Details】Risk-taking is gambling, and it is easier and more exciting to take risks than to exercise caution. Very often, what is called risk-taking is a premature action done by skipping the process of rigorous research, meticulous planning, and robust and patient execution of the plan, which are the practices that are imperative for success. Young people must train themselves by sticking to these practices to gain enough knowledge and skills for their goals. In addition, to succeed in something by taking a risk often depends on experience, but young people lack adequate experience to take a risk. They should wait and learn until they are ready to take a risk years later.

【Counterargument-treatment】Lyly’s point that taking a risk can lead to personal growth sounds valid. since taking responsibility of the action and wider perspective and confidence gained through new experiences contributes to becoming well-rounded and resourceful, whether the person wins or loses. However, taking a risk also involves a huge loss when the challenger fails. For example, failing to establish a business will leave the person with a huge debt and sense of loss, regret, and feeling of inferiority. They may also lose their family and friends. Very strong will power and discipline is necessary to overcome the predicament, and most people are not so strong and become real losers, who give up their life itself. Even victory at an early age has a negative impact on the person’s life as it makes the person contented and conceited, even if the success was greatly due to luck, and personal growth will stop there.

【Conclusion】In the end, slow but steady is the best strategy. Real chances will come to those who are ready to grab it after making enough efforts. (306 words)

 


Write your response in 10 minutes. Show each other your responses. Write down questions or suggestions to each other’s response.

 

                                                   DRAFT