2025年6月9日月曜日

Writing for an Academic Discussion Should parents encourage their children to try new things? - revised -

Should parents actively encourage their children to try new experiences or let them pursue their interests at their own pace? (sociology)

 

 

Let’s Think

1.        What are the synonyms of “going out of one’s comfort zone”?

2.        What are the advantages and disadvantages of going out of your comfort zone?

3.        Do your parents try to push you out of your comfort zone? Do you think it is good or bad? Why?

 

Note:

1.      Taking a risk, trying something new, embracing challenges, expanding your horizons, pushing boundaries, and facing one’s fears are synonyms of “going out of one’s comfort zone”.

2.      The advantages: Growth of the body and mind, wider perspectives, new relationships, new interests, increased self-confidence, sense of achievement, habit of self-education or self-learning, etc.

The disadvantages: Loss of something important, disorientation, extreme stress and anxiety, risk of failure, exhaustion and burnout, etc.

 

 

Hints for Points

Agree

1.        Spare the rod and spoil the child.

2.        No pain, no gain.

3.        Parent birds stop feeding their babies at some point in their development so that they can learn to feed themselves.

4.        Adventures not only expand horizons but also cultivate resiliency and flexibility, which helps avoid being left behind or miss opportunities.

5.        Exposing children to as many things as possible makes children resourceful and creative in the future.

6.        Children will take self-development for granted and will be less reluctant to be weaned and explore the world by themselves.

7.        It’s parents’ responsibility to provide their children the best environment for learning because it’s difficult for children to educate themselves.

 

Disagree

1.        You can take a horse to water, but you can’t make it drink.

2.        Nothing is hard to a willing mind.

3.        Different strokes for different folks.

4.        Parents’ smothering eagerness may lead to their children’s resentment and less interest in the intended challenge.

 

 

Sample Answer for Ideas and Expressions

ThesisAlthough I agree with Noah in that voluntary action of children driven by their own interest is the most significant factor to their learning and development, I agree more with Nadia that careful and well-balanced parental guidance for challenges will enhance their children’s power to live in the future.

Supporting DetailsSince they have lived longer and have wider perspectives, parents must encourage their children to get out of their children’s room and see the world or challenge themselves. Parents can see what will happen to their children in the future if they keep doing what they are doing or, more importantly, miss doing what they should be doing right now. Failing to provide opportunities for a better future by encouraging their children to challenge themselves is a neglect.

Counterargument-treatmentOf course, it is out of question to forcibly have children work more or try something new against their will. Children have their own rights to pursue happiness. However, since their knowledge about the world and cognitive ability is not complete yet, adults around them is responsible for assisting the early stages of their journey of life, especially when the children are wasting their time and opportunity to develop their ability to its full potential due to ignorance and circumstantial conditions that keep them in a narrow world.

ConclusionParents are usually the only adults that children depend on for navigating life. Thus, they are in charge of motivating their children to go beyond their comfort zones and expand their horizons. (247 words)


Write your response in 10 minutes. Show each other your responses. Write down questions or suggestions to each other’s response.

 

 

                                                   DRAFT

 

 

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

 


2025年6月7日土曜日

Writing for an Academic Discussion Should parents encourage their children to try new things?

Should parents actively encourage their children to try new experiences or let them pursue their interests at their own pace? (sociology)

 

 

Let’s Think

1.        What are the synonyms of “going out of one’s comfort zone”?

2.        What are the advantages and disadvantages of going out of your comfort zone?

3.        Do your parents try to push you out of your comfort zone? Do you think it is good or bad? Why?

 

Note:

1.      Taking a risk, trying something new, embracing challenges, expanding your horizons, pushing boundaries, and facing one’s fears are synonyms of “going out of one’s comfort zone”.

2.      The advantages: Growth of the body and mind, wider perspectives, new relationships, new interests, increased self-confidence, sense of achievement, habit of self-education or self-learning, etc.

The disadvantages: Loss of something important, disorientation, extreme stress and anxiety, risk of failure, exhaustion and burnout, etc.

 

 

Hints for Points

Agree

1.        Spare the rod and spoil the child.

2.        No pain, no gain.

3.        Parent birds stop feeding their babies at some point so that they can learn to feed themselves.

4.        Adventures not only expand opportunities but also cultivate resiliency and help avoid being left behind or miss chances.

5.        Exposing children to as many things as possible make children resourceful and creative in the future.

6.        Children will take self-development for granted and will be less reluctant to become weaned and explore the world by themselves.

 

Disagree

1.        You can take a horse to water, but you can’t make it drink.

2.        Nothing is hard to a willing mind.

3.        Different strokes for different folks.

4.        Parents’ smothering eagerness may lead to their children’s resentment and less interest in the intended challenge.

 

 

Sample Answer for Ideas and Expressions

ThesisAlthough I agree with Noah in that voluntary action of children following their own interest will contribute to their best growth, I agree more with Nadia that careful and well-balanced parental guidance for challenges will facilitate their children’s power to live in the future.

Supporting DetailsSince they have lived longer and have wider perspectives, parents must encourage their children to get out of their children’s room and see the world or challenge themselves. Parents can see what will happen to their children in the future if they keep doing what they are doing or, more importantly, miss doing what they should be doing right now. Failing to provide opportunities for a better future by encouraging their children to challenge themselves is a neglect.

Counterargument-treatmentOf course, it is out of question to forcibly have children try something new against their will. Children have their own rights to pursue happiness. However, since their knowledge about the world and cognitive ability is not complete yet, adults around them is responsible for providing support, especially when the children are wasting their time and opportunity to develop their ability to the full potential due to ignorance and circumstantial conditions to keep them in a narrow world.

ConclusionParents are usually the only adults that children depend on for navigating life. Thus, they have full responsibility to motivate their children to go beyond their comfort zones and expand their horizons. (230 words)


Write your response in 10 minutes. Show each other your responses. Write down questions or suggestions to each other’s response.

 

 

                                                   DRAFT

 

 

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

 


2025年6月2日月曜日

Writing for an Academic Discussion  Is changing your outward appearance the best way to initiate life change?  - revised -

Do you agree or disagree that changing your outward appearance is the best way to initiate life change (sociology)

 

 

Let’s Think

1.        Give examples of changing your outward appearance.

2.        Give examples of life change.

3.        Have you ever experienced a life change or seen that happen to others? What do you think caused the change?

 

Notes:

1.        Changing your outward appearance would be changing your fashion style and having a cosmetic surgery. It also includes gaining physical health such as taking up exercise or alteration of your diet.

2.        Life changes would be having a personality change, gaining confidence, or going through a transformation in relationships.

 

 

Hints for Points

Agree

1.        Since good looks is everything in life, especially among young people, change of outward appearance means change of life.

2.        You gain stronger self-confidence by representing yourself differently than before.

3.        Others will see you in a new light, and this will give a profound influence on your lifestyle such as confidence and attitude.

4.        Depending on the situation, people around you may treat you totally differently if a person changes the person’s looks. For example, if an unkempt person starts paying attention to hygiene and becomes clean and tidy, friends and family will be nicer to the person than before.

 

Disagree

1.        Transformation of the outward appearance is not a cause but a result of a transformation of the inner-self, the person’s mind and soul.

2.        Soul-searching, deep reflection of yourself, leads to a fundamental transformation of yourself, which leads to change of your attitude, which leads to change of your life.

3.        Learning logical and critical thinking and making cognitive changes strengthen your mind and underpin your approach to the world.

4.        Pulling through a trial or challenge drastically improves the person’s physical expression.

5.        Meeting a new person or moving to a new place helps start all over again, start anew.

6.        Becoming beautiful can be a curse.

 

 

Sample Answer for Ideas and Expressions

ThesisAlthough I partially agree with Mia that change of looks can attract good luck, I think it is just a best way rather than the best way to initiate life change.

Supporting DetailsI believe that a good life comes from constant hard work and good relationships. Therefore, to make efforts for a long time, always conscious of the environment around you and adjusting yourself to a new situation, is the best and the only way to initiate life change. Working on your outer looks can be a part of this endeavour, but not the main factor to achieve a better life.

Counterargument-treatmentOutward looks is mostly in the area of fortune. For example, a skin color decides the survival rate of a baby, the average life-time income, and the average life span in the US. Being born as a black person in a ghetto almost certainly tells the person that making efforts is useless. No matter how good and nice the person is, prejudice and discrimination halt the advancement of the person as the way the world or at least a certain group of people looks at the person won’t change and black people cannot change their skin color. However, their earnest and tenacious work to build a good life and society supported by faith in goodness or belief in human favor for genuine integrity in life has gradually but surely has built a good presence of the black population in the American society. Another example is successful immigrants. It is clear that it was not their physical appearance that initiated the improvement of their lives. Doing jobs that no one wants to do day and night, while making efforts to blend in society by making friends with the native residents, has led to their prosperity.

ConclusionTherefore, changing outward appearance is not the best way to get out of your current situation although it can be a big issue for many people. (320 words)


Write your response in 10 minutes. Show each other your responses. Write down questions or suggestions to each other’s response.

 

 

                                                   DRAFT