2024年11月19日火曜日

Writing for Academic Discussion  Does technology help us understand ourselves better? - revised -

Lesson 22   Does technology help us understand ourselves better, or does it hinder our self-awareness?

 

 

Lets Think

1.        What does “to understand ourselves” mean?

Note: To understand ourselves may mean to understand what is a human as well as what kind of person you are. It could also mean where we come from, where we are, and what is important in life.

 

2.        How do we understand ourselves? Does technology help us do it?

Note: To understand ourselves, we need to be objective, compare ourselves with others, and have plenty of information.

 

 

Hints for Points

Technology helps us understand ourselves better:

1.        Information about us is collected by technology. Thanks to the advancement of technology, we now have very accurate information about the history of the earth and life. Studies of humanities are also helped by technology like DNA analysis.

 

2.        Watching the world and people leads to understanding of ourselves. The media, especially social media, provide us with abundant information about the world and people. You can also have insights about humans. For example, videos show us we humans can be both brave and cowardly, angelic and evil.

 

3.        Interaction with other people helps us understand ourselves, and technology increases the opportunity to interact with others. For example, by communicating with others through social media, you can learn what kind of person you are.

 

4.        Technology helps find individual properties. For example, DNA analysis shows you what kind of people you are related to, what kind of property your body has, and whether the risk of your having a particular disease is high or not.

 

Technology hinders our self-awareness:

1.        Technology deals with matter, the physical side of the world, so it can tell us only about our physical aspect.

 

2.        The smartphone does not tell you what kind of person you really are. Apps can tell you what type of personality you have, but this categorization does not lead to real understanding of yourself..

 

3.        Information gained through technology might be distracting us from self-reflection. We think we have understood ourselves by watching news and Twitter feeds and do not explore ourselves more deeply. For example, technology told us that we had conquered nature, when we were actually disrupting nature by technology and we are now getting backlash from nature.

 

4.        Social media can distort our image of ourselves. It is easy to wear a persona online and we can believe it our real character. Also, when we should be satisfied with life just by being alive, many of us suffer from the gap between what we think we should be and what we actually are by comparing ourselves with others, even though those others might be making themselves look better than they really are.

 

 

Sample Answer for Ideas and Expressions

ThesisI think that technology helps us understand ourselves with a reservation, sine it prevents us from delving into our own being in the real world.

Supporting DetailsTechnological development has helped us collect information to understand humans such as where in the universe we are and what we are made of and how our body works. Now we know that we live on a planet that is circling around the sun in our solar system which is a tiny part of the galaxy, which is a tiny part of an ever-expanding space. It has shown that the first human was in Africa and that all humans are brothers and sisters. It has also been finding out what is in our cells and atoms, and we all know that we are made up of the same elements as we find in the outer space.

ReservationHowever, technology can only investigate the materialistic side of humans or quantify the working of our mind and society. It cannot help us organically learn about people and society. To learn ourselves, we need to actually live in this world and interact with other humans and nature, but we are increasingly living individually in the virtual world and are getting out of touch. Our memory and wisdom as human race passed down among us are now being lost as we lose face-to-face communication and read books less often, absorbed in information coming from online platforms, which can be useless, meaningless, or deceptive.

ConclusionSince what makes up humans is our mind rather than our body and our mind is degenerating due to technology, we might be losing insight into ourselves now. (268 words)




 

 

Write your response in 10 minutes. Show each other your responses. Write down questions or suggestions to each other’s response.

 

 

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2024年11月18日月曜日

Writing for Academic Discussion  Does technology help us understand ourselves better? - revised -

Does technology help us understand ourselves better, or does it hinder our self-awareness?

 

 

Lets Think

1.        What does “to understand ourselves” mean?

Note: To understand ourselves may mean to understand what is a human as well as what kind of person you are. It could also mean where we come from, where we are, and what is important in life.

 

2.        How do we understand ourselves? Does technology help us do it?

Note: To understand ourselves, we need to be objective, compare ourselves with others, and have plenty of information.

 

 

Hints for Points

Technology helps us understand ourselves better:

1.        Information about us is collected by technology. Thanks to the advancement of technology, we now have very accurate information about the history of the earth and life. Studies of humanities are also helped by technology like DNA analysis.

 

2.        Watching the world and people leads to understanding of ourselves. The media, especially social media, provide us with abundant information about the world and people. You can also have insights about humans. For example, videos show us we humans can be both brave and cowardly, angelic and evil.

 

3.        Interaction with other people helps us understand ourselves, and technology increases the opportunity to interact with others. For example, by communicating with others through social media, you can learn what kind of person you are.

 

4.        Technology helps find individual properties. For example, DNA analysis shows you what kind of people you are related to, what kind of property your body has, and whether the risk of your having a particular disease is high or not.

 

Technology hinders our self-awareness:

1.        Technology deals with matter, the physical side of the world, so it can tell us only about our physical aspect.

 

2.        The smartphone does not tell you what kind of person you really are. Apps can tell you what type of personality you have, but this categorization does not lead to real understanding of yourself..

 

3.        Information gained through technology might be distracting us from self-reflection. We think we have understood ourselves by watching news and Twitter feeds and do not explore ourselves more deeply. For example, technology told us that we had conquered nature, when we were actually disrupting nature by technology and we are now getting backlash from nature.

 

4.        Social media can distort our image of ourselves. It is easy to wear a persona online and we can believe it our real character. Also, when we should be satisfied with life just by being alive, many of us suffer from the gap between what we think we should be and what we actually are by comparing ourselves with others, even though those others might be making themselves look better than they really are.

 

 

Sample Answer for Ideas and Expressions

ThesisI think that technology helps us understand ourselves on the one side, while it prevents us from delving into our own being.

Supporting DetailsTechnological development has helped us collect information to understand humans such as where in the universe we are and what we are made of and how our body works. Now we know that we live on a planet that is circling around the sun in our solar system which is a tiny part of the galaxy, which is a tiny part of an ever-expanding space. It has shown that the first human was in Africa and that all humans are brothers and sisters. It has also been finding out what is in our cells and atoms, and we all know that we are made up of the same elements as we find in the outer space.

ReservationHowever, technology can only investigate the materialistic side of humans or quantify the working of our mind and society. For example, it tells us the anatomy and physiology of our brain and analyzes our thinking and behavior patterns, but it cannot help us organically learn about people and society. Our ancestors watched human behavior using not technology but their brain and left words of wisdom about ourselves. But we read those words less often than before because we are absorbed in information coming from online platforms now, and thus we might be losing our understanding of us.

ConclusionSince what makes up humans is our mind rather than our body, we might be losing insight into ourselves now. (254 words)        




 

 

Write your response in 10 minutes. Show each other your responses. Write down questions or suggestions to each other’s response.

 

 

                                                   DRAFT

 

 

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

                                                                                                                          

 

 

 


Writing for Academic Discussion Roommates your university assings or those who you choose? - rewrite -

Would you rather have the university assign roommates, or would you prefer to choose your own? (education)

 

 

Lets Think

1.     If the assignment of roommates by the university is random, what would they be like?

2.     If the assignment of roommates by the university not random, how would they be chosen?

3.     What are the advantages and disadvantages of selecting your roommate by yourself?

 

 

Hints for Points

1.        Randomness may bring interesting experiences. It may also make me mature.

2.        I would like to make friends with many different people and understand them.

3.        College life is to interact with various people to expand your horizon.

4.        I do not want other people to decide who I should live with.

5.        University may either put the same kind of people together or the other way around. Either way will make some students unhappy.

6.        I would choose my best friends as my roommates for good memories and would do things we can only do during college years like discussing all night every day.

7.        I would like to choose my roommates to make the best environment for study.

8.        I would rather live with people who are similar to me because it would stabilize my college life.

9.        I would rather be with quiet and kind people.

 

 

Sample Answer Structure


A          

My choice

My idea about college life

Universitys choice

Conclusion

 

B

My choice

Good point 1

Good point 2

Bad points and why I do not care

Conclusion


 

Sample for Ideas and Expressions

My choiceLike Ben, I find it exciting to meet new people, but when it comes to roommates of a university dormitory, I would rather choose them by myself.

Supporting details (My idea about dorm life)Living in a dorm room is a precious experience which, if you get the most out of it, will be a lifetime treasure. Whether it is possible or not depends on whether the roommates are your friends or the arranged. With the arranged roommates, you may end up just sharing the space and having small talks once in a while unless they are miraculously compatible with you. Even if you match, it takes a while to open up to each other. If you choose people you already know well, you can start a fulfilling dorm life on day one.

Counterargument-treatmentI know that networking is important. As Ben says, unexpected friendships will expand your life. However, networking can be done outside of dorms. Also, it is often the case that most acquaintances are attractive or exciting to be with but not the type you can stand being with for more than a few hours. It is preferable that roommates are people you can spend time with forever.

ConclusionAfter all, a dormitory room is a half-private space. It is fundamentally a place for rest and recharge, a space for reflection and development, and thus sharing the room with people I can be naturally on good terms with would be the best. (235 words)

 

My choiceI prefer to choose my roommates because the university assignment can be racist.

Supporting details (My concern about letting the school choose)As I am a Japanese, they may make me join other Asian students. Although I have no problem with sharing a room with other Asians, this is different from what I expect in my dorm life. I would like to live with people from non-Asian countries to experience totally different values, mindset, and customs from mine and would like to make efforts for mutual understanding.

Counterargument-treatmentUniversity officials may think it for the good of Asians to stay together in a non-Asian country, but this is not what they are supposed to assume. Indeed, living with other Asians would be comfortable because we have a lot in common, and the comfort will be the stumbling block to going out and mingling with people with various backgrounds.

ConclusionUniversities should not decide which students should hang out together. Thus, I would rather choose my roommates myself. (156 words)

 


 

 

Write your response in 10 minutes. Show each other your responses. Write down questions or suggestions to each other’s response.

 

 

                                                   DRAFT